Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Clarify meaning and use correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g. “shame”, “fray”, “pray kitar”). Say whether you tried new activities, name an activity, describe how you felt and why you joined. Keep it to 2–4 sentences and use simple past for childhood events.

Exemplo: Yes, I had chances to try new activities as a child. For example, I joined a school music club because I saw other children playing guitar and thought it looked interesting, so I wanted to learn. At first I felt shy, but practicing regularly helped me gain confidence.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion and support it with one or two concise reasons using linking words. Use correct verb forms and more precise vocabulary (e.g. “stimulate” → “encourage”, “developed” → “changing fast”). Keep sentences complete and logical, and avoid vague endings. Use present simple for general statements.

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try different things because it encourages personal growth and helps you learn new skills. For instance, trying new jobs or hobbies can broaden your perspective and make you more adaptable in a rapidly changing world.

× Yes, I had opportunity to shame my new activity when I was shy, for example I fray yet worry bow and run pray kitar because I saw some people they pray is interesting

✓ Yes, I had the opportunity to try new activities when I was shy; for example, I was afraid to join because I saw some people and their praying looked interesting.

Errors: missing article before 'opportunity' (article error, mapped to singular/plural issue here), incorrect verb choices ('shame' should be 'try' or 'show' depending on meaning), incorrect word forms ('fray' should be 'afraid'), redundant pronoun 'they' and incorrect clause 'they pray is interesting'. Suggestion: use 'the opportunity' for a singular noun, replace unclear verbs with 'try' or 'join', use correct adjectives ('afraid') and rephrase the relative clause to 'their praying looked interesting' or 'them praying looked interesting' to make sentence grammatical and clear.

× Yes, people should try to do new things because it simulate you do something, it make you know how to do that because the world had developed no one days and

✓ Yes, people should try new things because it helps you learn how to do them; the world is constantly developing.

Errors: awkward structure and multiple tense problems. 'It simulate you do something' and 'it make you know how to do that' are ungrammatical (verb form and subject-verb agreement). 'The world had developed no one days' is incorrect tense and wording. Suggestions: use 'helps you learn' for present general truth, ensure subject-verb agreement ('helps' not 'simulate'), use plural pronouns consistently ('them'), and express ongoing development as 'the world is constantly developing.'