Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and singular/plural errors, and finish with a brief specific detail. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundant phrasing.

Exemplo: Yes. I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my mother encouraged me to learn an instrument, so I chose the piano and practiced every day. As a result, I improved my discipline and enjoyed performing in a few school recitals.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, correct collocations and word forms, and add one specific reason or example linked with a linking word. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid vague phrases like 'brain activities'.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe people should try different things because new experiences broaden their skills and confidence. For instance, learning languages or hobbies helps you think more flexibly and increases your chances of success in study or work.

× Yes, I have a lot of opportunities to try new activities.

✓ Yes, I had a lot of opportunities to try new activities.

The examiner asked about childhood, a past time, so the student should use past tense. Change 'have' to 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when referring to past experiences.

× When I was young my mom told me that I should study a new instruments, so I choose piano and I practice piano every day and attend some.

✓ When I was young, my mom told me that I should study a new instrument, so I chose the piano, and I practiced the piano every day and attended some lessons.

Multiple issues: 'a new instruments' mixes singular/plural and article use: use 'a new instrument' (Grammar problem types 1 and 22). 'choose' is present but the context is past: use past tense 'chose' (ID 5). 'practice' should be past 'practiced'. Also 'attend some' is incomplete; add 'lessons'. Use 'the piano' when naming an instrument practiced regularly. Suggestions: keep verbs consistent in past tense for past events, match singular/plural with articles, and include the object after 'attend' (attend lessons).

× Yes, I think people should try different things because it can expand their brain activities and can strengthen their confident so that they can achieve success in the future.

✓ Yes, I think people should try different things because it can expand their brain activity and can strengthen their confidence so that they can achieve success in the future.

Errors: 'brain activities' is unnatural and should be the uncountable noun 'brain activity' (ID 13). 'confident' is an adjective; the noun 'confidence' is required here (ID 13). The sentence tense is acceptable (present general statements). Suggestions: use correct noun forms ('activity', 'confidence') for clarity and natural English.