Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tenses and linking words. Avoid unnecessary fillers like “Let me think” unless used briefly. For example, use past tense consistently (“I had,” “I learned”) and add a specific activity to illustrate your experience.

Exemplo: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my mother was a teacher who encouraged me to join the school choir and a science club, so I learned public speaking and basic experiments. As a result, I became more confident and curious about learning.

Sugestão: Make your opinion direct and support it with concise reasons and a brief example. Use linking words (for example, therefore, because) and avoid vague absolute statements like “you need to try everything.” Express moderation and clarity, and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “do their best”).

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover interests and develop new skills. For example, learning a musical instrument or volunteering can build discipline and confidence; therefore, people should try activities that interest them and do their best at those.

× I consider that I had a lot of experiences in my childhood, especially my mother is a teacher, so that I can learned a lot of things.

✓ I think that I had a lot of experiences in my childhood, especially because my mother was a teacher, so I learned a lot of things.

Multiple issues: 'consider' as used is awkward for speaking — use 'think' for opinion; 'especially my mother is a teacher' mixes time frames and needs a connector and past tense ('was') to match 'had' and 'learned'; 'can learned' is ungrammatical because 'can' should be followed by the base verb 'learn' (modal + base) and the sentence refers to past learning so base past 'learned' is appropriate without 'can'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for childhood events, use appropriate connectors like 'because' and use correct verb forms after modals (or avoid unnecessary modals).

× Definitely, because people were born to experience this world and their life.

✓ Definitely, because people are born to experience the world and their lives.

The original mixes past tense 'were born' with a general truth. Use simple present 'are born' for general statements. Also 'their life' should be plural 'their lives' to match plural 'people'. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths and ensure plural agreement between noun and pronoun.

× So I think that is very important.

✓ So I think that is very important.

This sentence is grammatical but slightly vague: 'that' refers to the previous idea (trying many things) and is acceptable. No grammatical correction is required. Suggestion: you could be more specific by saying 'trying many things is very important.'

× You need to try everything on your best.

✓ You need to try your best at everything.

The phrase 'on your best' is an incorrect collocation. The correct idiom is 'try your best' meaning make the greatest effort. To express doing many things well, 'try your best at everything' or 'try your best in everything you do' are natural. Suggestion: use established collocations like 'try your best' and place them before or after the object as appropriate.