Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid awkward or incorrect phrases (e.g., “survived a chance to drive” and “parents also smoking”), and use one or two specific supporting details linked with simple connectors (for example, “and” or “also”). Keep answers natural and within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. As a child I had many chances to try new activities. My school ran clubs, so I joined the football team and a drawing class, and my parents sent me to a summer camp where I learned canoeing for the first time. These experiences helped me try new things and gain confidence.

Sugestão: Focus on accurate word choice and concise structure. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give one or two concrete reasons with linking words (“because”, “for example”, “so”). Correct collocations (e.g., “save them” → “benefit them” or “help them”) and unclear phrases (“increased cover”)—use precise descriptions of improvements. Avoid adding unnecessary politeness like “Thank you.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try different activities because it helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, last year I learned to cook, which improved my confidence and allowed me to prepare meals for friends. However, it’s best to try new things gradually rather than all at once.

× Yes, well, yes, I have survived a chance to drive new activities.

✓ Yes, well, I had the chance to try new activities.

The original sentence uses 'have survived a chance to drive' which is incorrect verb usage and word choice. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). 'Survived' and 'drive' do not fit context; use 'had the chance to try' to express opportunity in the past. Suggestion: use simple past 'had' for a past habit and common expressions like 'try new activities.'

× As a child my school ran different clubs, so I enjoyed the football team and drawing class and my parents also smoking through a summer camp where I learned where it is.

✓ As a child my school ran different clubs, so I joined the football team and a drawing class, and my parents also sent me to a summer camp where I learned many new things.

This sentence mixes unrelated verbs and has incorrect verb forms ('smoking through', 'where I learned where it is'), which is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use 'joined' for participation, 'sent me to' for parents arranging attendance, and clarify what was learned. Suggestion: break long sentences into clearer parts and choose verbs that match the meaning (join, send, learn).

× For example, at the camp I tried for the first time.

✓ For example, at the camp I tried painting for the first time.

The sentence lacks an object after 'tried' making it incomplete — a sentence structure error (ID 26). Specify what was tried (e.g., painting) to complete the idea. Suggestion: always include the activity or object after verbs like 'try' when describing experiences.

× Well, I think people should try different things because they save them, learn about themselves and create new skills.

✓ Well, I think people should try different things because they help them learn about themselves and develop new skills.

The phrase 'they save them' is incorrect and unclear; this is a modal/word choice issue (ID 4). Replace with 'help them' to show result of trying things. Also use 'develop' or 'acquire' for skills. Suggestion: use 'should' correctly with verbs that express benefit and ensure pronoun references are clear.

× For example, last year I tried cooking and I increased cover.

✓ For example, last year I tried cooking and I improved a lot.

'Increased cover' is ungrammatical and likely a wrong word choice; this is a verb/word form issue (ID 9). Use 'improved' (past tense/participle) to show progress and add 'a lot' or specific detail. Suggestion: choose verbs that express improvement (improve, get better) and pair them with adverbs or specifics.

× I really enjoy it and now I cook for friends sometimes.

✓ I really enjoy it and now I sometimes cook for friends.

Original sentence is mostly correct but adverb placement is awkward — present tense/adverb placement issue (ID 6 and 20). Place 'sometimes' before the verb phrase for natural word order: 'I sometimes cook for friends.' Suggestion: put frequency adverbs before main verbs in simple present.

× So it's good to experiment but you don't have to do everything at once.

✓ So it's good to experiment, but you don't have to do everything at once.

Missing comma before conjunction creates a run-on feel; this is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). Adding the comma improves clarity. Suggestion: use a comma before 'but' when joining two independent clauses.