Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and gives specific examples, which is good. To improve, make the response more fluent by removing filler sounds (e.g. “UH”), correct small grammar errors (e.g. “a weekend swimming classes” → “weekend swimming classes” or “a weekend swimming class”), and use a clear topic sentence followed by linked supporting details. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences) and use linking words like “for example” or “as a result.”

Exemplo: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I joined the school drama club and attended weekend swimming classes, which helped me become more confident and make new friends. As a result, I became more comfortable speaking in public and working with others.

Sugestão: Your answer shows a positive idea but is unclear due to many fillers, repetition, and awkward grammar. To improve, state a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I think people should try many different things.”), then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (e.g. “because” or “this helps”). Use precise vocabulary (e.g. “creativity,” “start a business,” “personal growth”) and avoid repeating words. Keep to 2–4 coherent sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it stimulates creativity and promotes personal growth. For instance, experimenting with hobbies or starting a small business can help people discover new talents and build confidence. Therefore, trying new activities can lead to long-term development.

× For example, I joined the new UH, I joined the school drama club and a weekend swimming classes UH, which helped me become more confident and make new friends.

✓ For example, I joined the new UH, the school drama club, and a weekend swimming class, which helped me become more confident and make new friends.

The phrase 'a weekend swimming classes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'classes'. Use singular 'class' to match the article or remove 'a' and use plural with appropriate determiners. Also use commas to separate items in a list for clarity. Suggestion: decide singular or plural and keep articles consistent (e.g., 'a weekend swimming class' or 'weekend swimming classes').

× Yes, uh, nowadays, uh, people will make own uh, creativity, like, uh, uh, own, own, uh, culture, own business, uh, own, uh, activities, uh, it will be growth then.

✓ Yes, nowadays people will develop their own creativity, culture, businesses, and activities, which will help them grow.

The original sentence is disfluent and has incorrect word order and missing possessive pronouns. 'Make own creativity' is ungrammatical; use 'develop their own creativity'. Use plural forms consistently ('businesses') or keep singular with article. Replace 'it will be growth then' with 'which will help them grow' for natural expression. Remove filler 'uh' and repeat words; use clear subject-verb agreement and correct pronouns ('their').