Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid sentence fragments and tense errors. Mention a concrete activity and how you felt or what changed to make your answer more informative and natural.

Exemplo: Yes. I had few opportunities to try new activities as a child because I felt shy and nervous about unfamiliar situations. For example, I once joined a school art club, but I was too scared to speak to others at first; however, after a few weeks I became more comfortable and started sharing my ideas.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with reasons and a short example. Use linking words (for example, however, because) and avoid repetition. Use more precise vocabulary (try new experiences, broaden skills) and correct sentence structure.

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try different things because doing so broadens their skills and helps them discover interests. For example, learning a new language or volunteering can improve communication skills and boost career prospects.

× When I was a child. I'm so scared learning new opportunity since. I'm nervous and shy during that time.

✓ When I was a child, I was very scared of learning new things. I was nervous and shy during that time.

The original contains sentence fragments and incorrect structure. 'When I was a child.' is a fragment; it should connect to a main clause. 'I'm so scared learning new opportunity since.' mixes tenses and incorrect word forms: 'I'm' (present) conflicts with 'when I was a child' (past), 'scared learning' needs 'scared of learning', and 'new opportunity' is count/usage wrong for general activities — use 'new things' or 'new opportunities'. Changing to past tense ('I was') matches the time frame. Also replace 'since' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: use complete sentences, match tense to time expressions, and use 'scared of learning new things.'

× Well, some people they want to try a new opportunity, but some people they don't like to try a new opportunity.

✓ Well, some people want to try new opportunities, but others don't like to try them.

The sentence is redundant and uses pronoun/patterns awkwardly: repeating 'people' and using 'they' after repeating the noun is unnecessary. Also 'a new opportunity' is too specific; plural 'new opportunities' fits the general meaning. Use 'others' to replace 'some people they' and 'them' to refer back to 'opportunities.' This improves cohesion and grammaticality.

× For me, I want for me, I want to learn a new opportunity and I want to grow my knowledge and career.

✓ For me, I want to learn new things and to develop my knowledge and career.

The original repeats 'for me' and contains incorrect collocation 'learn a new opportunity.' You 'learn new things' or 'take new opportunities.' Also parallelism is needed: use 'to learn' and 'to develop' or 'learn... and develop.' 'Grow my knowledge and career' is awkward; 'develop my knowledge and career' or 'advance my knowledge and career' is more natural. Remove repetition and correct collocations.