Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity, grammar, and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence addressing the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word order (e.g., use past tense: 'I had'). Avoid redundancy and filler phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child, but I was too shy to join most of them. For example, my school held plays and music performances every year, yet I only watched from the audience because I felt nervous. Over time I became more confident and eventually joined a school choir in my final year.

Sugestão: Make your opinion clear with a concise topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for example, moreover) and choose precise vocabulary (experiences, develop skills) instead of vague phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them discover interests and develop new skills. For example, trying a sport or learning an instrument can improve confidence and teach discipline. Moreover, varied experiences make you more adaptable in future situations.

× Yeah, I have many opportunities to take part in activities as a child, but at that time I was so unconfident childhood never take part in anything like a is a school parties, in school programs and all days etcetera, other.

✓ Yes, I had many opportunities to take part in activities as a child, but at that time I was so unconfident that I never took part in anything, such as school parties or school programs.

Errors: mixed tenses and plural/singular mismatch. The speaker refers to childhood (past), so use past tense 'had' and 'took' (Past tense issue ID 5). The phrase 'a is a school parties' is ungrammatical and mixes singular/plural; replace with 'such as school parties or school programs' to list examples correctly. Also add 'that' to introduce the clause 'I was so unconfident that I never took part…'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently, use 'such as' for examples, and correct verb forms for past actions.

× Yeah, people should try different things as they can.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can.

Errors: word order and missing quantifier. The natural phrase is 'try as many different things as they can.' This uses modal 'should' correctly (Modal verb usage ID 4) but requires the quantifier 'as many' (Incorrect use of quantifiers ID 14) and correct word order. Suggestion: place 'as many' before 'different things' and keep 'as they can' at the end.

× It is very good to have many experiences in life and do such a great full activities that you should learn from it.

✓ It is very good to have many experiences in life and to do activities from which you can learn a lot.

Errors: incorrect adjective/adverb forms and collocation. 'Great full' is incorrect; likely 'great' or 'fulfilling'. 'Do such a great full activities' mixes forms and has number disagreement (Singular and plural issue ID 1). Also 'that you should learn from it' is awkward and contains a pronoun reference problem (Incorrect use of pronouns ID 12). Revised: use 'activities from which you can learn a lot' for clarity and correct grammar. Suggestion: choose correct adjective ('fulfilling' or 'great'), ensure agreement with 'activities', and use clearer relative clause structure.