Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và thì (nên dùng thì quá khứ), rút gọn và rõ ràng hơn, thêm câu chủ đề trực tiếp và chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ: sửa lỗi động từ (didn't have, I rarely joined), tránh từ thừa (like), hạn chế độ dài dưới 5 câu và dùng liên từ khi cần để nối ý.

Exemplo: I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child because I was quite shy and lacked confidence. For example, I rarely joined school clubs or played team sports, so I missed chances to make friends and develop social skills. Looking back, I wish my parents had encouraged me to join one activity at least once.

Sugestão: Cải thiện lựa chọn từ và cấu trúc câu: dùng từ phù hợp (try different things), tránh lặp từ và câu chưa hoàn chỉnh. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích lý do với ví dụ hoặc kết quả cụ thể, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Tránh dùng từ thân mật như “you know” trong thi chính thức.

Exemplo: In my opinion, people should try different things because new experiences can open up future opportunities. For instance, learning a new skill like public speaking can boost confidence and improve career prospects. Therefore, experimenting with varied activities is usually beneficial.

× When I was a child, I do not have many opportunities to try new activities because at that time I was quite shy and lacked confidence.

✓ When I was a child, I did not have many opportunities to try new activities because I was quite shy and lacked confidence at that time.

ID 5: Past tense issue The sentence mixes present tense 'do not have' with past time marker 'When I was a child'. Use the past simple 'did not have' to match the past context. Also move 'at that time' to the end or remove it to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for all verbs referring to past events.

× For instance, I like never joined school clubs or sports.

✓ For instance, I never joined school clubs or sports.

ID 6: Present tense issue (incorrect use of 'like') and ID 5: Past tense issue The phrase 'I like never joined' incorrectly mixes present 'like' with past 'joined'. Remove 'like' to form the correct past simple 'I never joined'. If you intended 'I, like, never joined' as a filler, use commas: 'I, like, never joined', but this is informal. Suggestion: remove unnecessary words and use past simple to describe childhood habits.

× From my point of view, I think that people should change as many different things as they can because you know when you try a new thing that would be a great opportunity for you in the future and also you can.

✓ From my point of view, I think that people should try as many different things as they can because when you try something new it can be a great opportunity for the future, and it also helps you grow.

ID 4: Modal verb usage and ID 26: Sentence structure errors The original has 'should change as many different things' which is incorrect collocation; 'try' fits the question. 'That would be' is awkward after 'when'; use 'it can be' or 'it will be'. The ending 'and also you can' is incomplete; add a clear verb like 'it also helps you grow.' Suggestion: use correct verbs and complete clauses, keep modal 'should' then use simple present or modal for results ('can be', 'will help').