Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons. Use “scrolling on my phone” rather than “squirting on my phone,” and correct “both on my work and study” to “both work and study.” Finish your final thought with a complete sentence.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. I sometimes stay up late scrolling on my phone, and I also have a busy schedule with both work and study. As a result, I don’t always get enough rest.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating and restarting the same idea. State the situation clearly, then add one relevant detail. Correct “in evening” to “in the evening” and “that help” to “that helps”; make sure the answer ends with a complete thought.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired after a long day at work, especially when I also have studying to do. When I get home in the evening, I sometimes take a short nap to recharge.

Sugestão: Keep the useful ideas about taking a nap and drinking tea, but remove or rephrase the unclear sentences. Explain how one of these activities helps you feel better, using natural phrases such as “take a break from my desk” and “feel refreshed.”

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap or make myself a cup of tea. If I’ve been studying for a long time, I also take a break from my desk. These things help me feel refreshed and more energetic.

Sugestão: Your answer gives a clear distinction between casual and important events. Correct “make my effort” to “make an effort,” remove the unnecessary “as a result,” and change “It’s depend” to “It depends.” You could add a brief reason for your choice.

Exemplo: It depends on how tired I am and what the occasion is. I might skip a casual get-together, but I’ll make an effort to attend an important event, such as a close friend’s birthday. I wouldn’t want to miss a special occasion.

× Moreover, I have a busy schedule both on my work and study.

✓ Moreover, I have a busy schedule both at work and in my studies.

Use at work to describe your workplace or job, and in my studies to describe your academic activities. The original preposition on is not appropriate here.

× As a result, I sometimes feels.

✓ As a result, I sometimes feel tired.

The subject I takes the base form feel, not feels. The sentence also needs tired to complete the intended meaning.

× I often feel tired when having a long day of working when I because mainly because I have a busy schedule with both work and study.

✓ I often feel tired after a long day of work, mainly because I have a busy schedule with both work and study.

The original sentence repeats and combines conflicting clauses, including when I and because. Use one clear main clause followed by a concise reason. After a long day of work is also a natural structure for expressing when you feel tired.

× When I get home in evening, I usually take a nap that help me recharge and.

✓ When I get home in the evening, I usually take a nap that helps me recharge.

The expression is in the evening, so it needs the definite article the. The correction also removes the unfinished final and so the sentence is complete.

× When I get home in evening, I usually take a nap that help me recharge and.

✓ When I get home in the evening, I usually take a nap that helps me recharge.

The relative pronoun that refers to the singular noun nap. In the present simple, the verb therefore needs the third-person singular form helps.

× It's a happy I get from my parents.

✓ It's a habit I picked up from my parents.

Happy is an adjective and cannot be used as the countable noun after a in this sentence. Habit is a noun that fits the sentence structure and likely intended meaning.

× I may make my effort to attend as a result.

✓ I may make an effort to attend.

The standard expression is make an effort. Use the indefinite article an because effort is a singular countable noun beginning with a vowel sound. My effort would refer to a particular effort already identified.

× It's depend.

✓ It depends.

The subject it is third-person singular, so the present-simple verb needs the ending -s: depends.