Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 「Yes, I often feel tired.」と最初に直接答え、その後に理由を1〜2文で説明しましょう。現在の回答は文が長く、最後が未完です。また、「many plans where I have to do one day」は不自然なので、「a lot to do in one day」や「a busy schedule」を使うと自然です。学校、アルバイト、大学の課題を具体例として挙げる場合は、and also を繰り返しすぎないように整理してください。

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired because I have a busy schedule. I go to university, work part-time, and complete assignments, sometimes all in one day.

Sugestão: 「I feel tired when I get home.」のように、質問に対する具体的な時間や状況を最初に述べましょう。「come back to home」ではなく「get home」または「come home」が自然です。現在の回答は「all the all things」や「So when I finish」で意味が不明確で、文が途中で終わっています。「一日の予定をすべて終えたとき」という意味なら、because I have finished everything I needed to do today と表現できます。

Exemplo: I usually feel tired when I get home in the evening. By that time, I have finished my classes, my part-time job, and most of my assignments, so I just want to rest.

Sugestão: まず「I usually take a bath and watch dramas on my smartphone.」と、普段することを明確に答えましょう。「Was I」は不要で、「TV's」は「TV」または「television」、「on smartphones」は自分の行動なら「on my smartphone」が適切です。「trip many times」は文脈に合わないため削除してください。昨日の具体例を加える場合も、過去形で最後まで文を完成させましょう。また、質問への回答は2〜4文にまとめると効果的です。

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take a bath and watch a drama on my smartphone. For example, yesterday I was exhausted after work, so I took a long bath and watched television before going to bed.

Sugestão: 「No, I usually stay at home.」と直接答えた後、理由を一つ明確に説明しましょう。「I really exhausted」は「I feel really exhausted」、「stay with friend」は「spend time with my friends」とする必要があります。「care about what other things」は不自然なので、「I do not have enough energy to socialize」などを使うと自然です。最後の「and do. I think」は未完なので削除し、休む、入浴する、ドラマを見るなど具体的な行動を加えてください。

Exemplo: No, I usually stay at home when I feel tired. I do not have enough energy to socialize, so I prefer to take a bath, watch a drama, and go to bed early.

× Yes, I often feel tired because I have many plans where I have to do one day such as go to school and go to part time jobs and also do my assignment for university studies so I often.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because I have many things to do in one day, such as going to school, working part-time, and doing my university assignments.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use a clear structure with because and such as. After such as, use parallel forms: going, working, and doing.

× I feel tired when I come back to home.

✓ I feel tired when I come back home.

The expression come back home does not normally take the preposition to. Home is used directly after come back in this meaning.

× because I have many things to do today and I go back to all the all things have finished. So when I finish.

✓ I feel tired when I get home because I have finished everything I needed to do that day.

The original clauses are incomplete and have an unclear structure. Use the present perfect have finished to show that the tasks are completed before the speaker gets home. Everything is a complete pronoun and does not need all the all things.

× Was I take a bath and watch TV's or dramas on smartphones and trip many times.

✓ When I feel tired, I take a bath and watch TV shows or dramas on my smartphone.

Was I is not a correct structure for describing a regular habit. Begin with when I feel tired and use the simple present take and watch. Use my smartphone for one personal device, and use TV shows instead of the incorrect plural form TV's.

× Yesterday I was so excited, exhausted, so I when I go to home I took a bath and.

✓ Yesterday, I was exhausted, so when I went home, I took a bath.

The preposition to is not used before home in the expression went home. The sentence also needs a complete clause after so and should not end with the incomplete phrase and.

× Yesterday I was so excited, exhausted, so I when I go to home I took a bath and.

✓ Yesterday, I was exhausted, so when I went home, I took a bath.

Because the event happened yesterday, go must change to its past-tense form went. The other past-tense verbs, was and took, are consistent with this time reference.

× Yesterday I was so excited, exhausted, so I when I go to home I took a bath and.

✓ Yesterday, I was exhausted, so when I went home, I took a bath.

Excited means feeling happy or enthusiastic, whereas exhausted means extremely tired. Since the answer is about feeling tired, exhausted is the appropriate adjective here.

× No, I don't go and stay with friends because when I stay with friend I really exhausted because I have to care about what other things.

✓ No, I do not go out or stay with my friends because staying with them is exhausting, and I have to worry about other things.

Use or rather than and when presenting alternatives in a negative sentence. The sentence also needs a clearer connection between the reasons. The phrase what other things is incorrect here; use other things instead.

× when I stay with friend

✓ when I stay with a friend

A singular countable noun such as friend needs an article when it is not specific. Use a friend to mean any one friend.

× I really exhausted.

✓ I am really exhausted.

The adjective exhausted needs the linking verb am when the subject is I. A sentence in the present tense cannot use I exhausted without a form of be.

× So when I I'm tired I stay home alone and do. I think.

✓ So when I am tired, I stay home alone and do nothing.

The original sentence contains the duplicated subject and verb form I I'm and ends with an incomplete verb do. Use the complete clause when I am tired and add nothing after do to express the intended meaning.