Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答了问题，但表达不够自然，且“always feel so tired”和“miserable of my mind”用词不准确。建议先直接说明频率，再给出一个具体原因或场景。可以用“especially when...”连接细节，并避免重复使用“uh”。

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a long day at school. I usually feel mentally exhausted when I have too much work to do.

Sugestão: 回答包含时间和回家后的活动，但时态和搭配错误较多。“After I finished”应改为“After I finish”，“get back to my home”更自然的说法是“get home”，“feel flexible on my sofa”不符合语境，可以改为“relax on my sofa”或“collapse onto my sofa”。建议用清晰的时间顺序描述场景。

Exemplo: I usually feel tired after I finish all my work and get home. At that point, I just want to relax on the sofa, turn on the TV, and do nothing for a while.

Sugestão: 回答的核心意思比较清楚，但“make my concentrate”应改为“help me concentrate”，“such like”应改为“such as”，“ET”应改为“and so on”。建议先说明总体做法，再列举一到两个具体活动，并说明它们为什么有帮助。

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually do something relaxing that helps me concentrate on one thing. For example, I might draw or play the guitar because these activities help me forget about my stress.

Sugestão: 回答直接且观点明确，但句子缺少完整结构和连接词。“a E type person”应改为“an extroverted person”或“an outgoing person”，“come out”在这里应改为“go out”，“talk with my friend”可改为“talk to my friends”。建议使用“Although...，I...”或“because...”组织原因，并补充具体活动。

Exemplo: Sometimes I do, because I’m quite an outgoing person. Meeting my friends and chatting with them helps me relax, although I prefer staying at home when I feel extremely tired.

× Yes, I always feel so tired, uh, maybe just like some the uh, situation when I feel uh, miserable of my mind.

✓ Yes, I always feel so tired, maybe in some situations when I feel miserable.

“some”和“the”不能直接连用。表示“某些情况”时，应使用“some situations”；其中“situations”要用复数形式，因为“some”通常修饰可数名词复数。

× Yes, I always feel so tired, uh, maybe just like some the uh, situation when I feel uh, miserable of my mind.

✓ Yes, I always feel so tired, maybe in some situations when I feel mentally miserable.

“miserable of my mind”不是正确的英语表达。这里可以使用副词“mentally”修饰“miserable”，表示“心理上感到痛苦”。

× After I finished all of my work, when I get back to my home and feel so flexible on my sofa, open up my television and put all my things.

✓ After I finish all of my work and get home, I relax on my sofa, turn on the television, and put my things away.

问题描述的是通常感到疲倦时的习惯，因此应该使用一般现在时。“finished”应改为“finish”，与“get”保持时态一致。回答日常习惯时，通常使用一般现在时，而不是过去时。

× After I finished all of my work, when I get back to my home and feel so flexible on my sofa, open up my television and put all my things.

✓ After I finish all of my work and get home, I feel comfortable on my sofa, turn on the television, and put my things away.

“flexible”表示“灵活的、柔韧的”，不能表示人在沙发上感到舒适。这里应使用形容词“comfortable”，表示“舒服的”。

× After I finished all of my work, when I get back to my home and feel so flexible on my sofa, open up my television and put all my things.

✓ After I finish all of my work and get home, I relax on my sofa, turn on the television, and put my things away.

原句以“After”和“When”引导了从句，但后面没有清晰的主句，导致句子结构不完整。应加入主语“I”和主要谓语“relax”，使句子结构完整。

× Maybe I will do something which can make my concentrate on one thing such like drawing, singing, playing my guitar and ET.

✓ Maybe I do something that can make me concentrate on one thing, such as drawing, singing, and playing my guitar.

问题询问的是平时感到疲倦时做什么，因此回答应使用一般现在时。“I will do”表示将来或临时决定，改为“I do”更符合题目的时态。

× Maybe I will do something which can make my concentrate on one thing such like drawing, singing, playing my guitar and ET.

✓ Maybe I do something that can make me concentrate on one thing, such as drawing, singing, and playing my guitar.

“make”后面应使用宾格代词“me”，不能使用物主代词“my”。正确结构是“make + 人 + 动词原形”，即“make me concentrate”。

× Sometimes because I am a E type person so I think come out or talk with my friend can make me feel relaxed.

✓ Sometimes, because I am an E-type person, I think that going out or talking with my friends can make me feel relaxed.

字母“E”的读音以元音音素开头，所以前面应使用“an”，而不是“a”。正确表达是“an E-type person”。

× Sometimes because I am a E type person so I think come out or talk with my friend can make me feel relaxed.

✓ Sometimes, because I am an E-type person, I think that going out or talking with my friends can make me feel relaxed.

“going out”和“talking with my friends”在句中共同作主语，因此两个动词都应使用动名词形式（动词加“-ing”）。不能直接使用“come out”或“talk”。

× Sometimes because I am a E type person so I think come out or talk with my friend can make me feel relaxed.

✓ Sometimes, because I am an E-type person, I think that going out or talking with my friends can make me feel relaxed.

“because”和“so”不能在同一个原因结果结构中重复使用。使用“because”时，不需要再使用“so”。此外，句子中加入逗号可以更清楚地分隔原因从句和主句。