Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and avoid combining too many ideas in one sentence. Use more natural expressions, such as “stay up late the night before,” “find it difficult to get up,” and “have a cup of coffee to wake myself up.” Also, replace “help me open that day” with “help me start the day,” and organize your reasons with clear linking words such as “because” and “as a result.”

Exemplo: Not really. I only feel tired in the morning if I stay up late the night before, because I find it difficult to get up early. However, I usually feel energetic during the day after having a cup of coffee and getting some sunlight. Meeting people also helps me feel more active.

Sugestão: The answer is relevant and gives two specific times, but the grammar and phrasing need improvement. Say “in the morning and in the evening,” “I find it difficult to get up,” and “after a hard day at work.” Use a clear structure to compare the two situations, and avoid awkward phrases such as “I have used all my energy in the day.”

Exemplo: I usually feel tired in the morning and in the evening. In the morning, it is difficult for me to get up if I stayed up late the night before. In the evening, I feel tired after a long day at work because I have used up most of my energy.

Sugestão: Your answer has a clear action and a reason, but some expressions are unnatural. Replace “force myself to stand up and to work” with “make myself get up and move around,” and say “sitting in the same chair makes me feel even more tired.” Explain the result more naturally and use an appropriate gerund structure after “makes.”

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually get up and move around for a few minutes. Sitting in the same chair makes me feel even more tired, so I find a quiet place to work or take a short break. This helps me refresh my mind and stay motivated.

Sugestão: You give a clear conditional answer and a good contrast between close friends and less familiar friends. Improve the grammar and word choice: say “which friends invite me,” “even if I’m tired,” “we rarely have time to get together,” and “get some proper rest.” Avoid “less important friend,” which sounds impolite; use “an acquaintance” or “a friend I’m not very close to.”

Exemplo: It depends on which friends invite me. If it is one of my best friends, I will probably go even if I’m tired, because we rarely have time to get together. However, if it is just an acquaintance, I might politely decline and stay home to get some proper rest.

× Not really. However, especially in the morning I sometimes feel tired because if I stay up late the last night I would feel hard to get up in the morning, but during the day I often feel energetic because I often give myself a cup of coffee in the morning to help me open that day and when I leave the house, I could enjoy under the sunlight and also engage in meeting with many people and it makes me more energized.

✓ Not really. However, I sometimes feel tired in the morning because, if I stay up late the night before, I find it hard to get up. During the day, I often feel energetic because I have a cup of coffee in the morning. When I leave the house, I can enjoy the sunlight and meet many people, which makes me feel more energized.

The original answer contains several ideas joined in one very long sentence. This creates an unclear sentence structure. Divide the ideas into shorter sentences and use clear connectors such as because, when, and which.

× Not really. However, especially in the morning I sometimes feel tired because if I stay up late the last night I would feel hard to get up in the morning, but during the day I often feel energetic because I often give myself a cup of coffee in the morning to help me open that day and when I leave the house, I could enjoy under the sunlight and also engage in meeting with many people and it makes me more energized.

✓ Not really. However, I sometimes feel tired in the morning because, if I stay up late the night before, I find it hard to get up. During the day, I often feel energetic because I have a cup of coffee in the morning. When I leave the house, I can enjoy the sunlight and meet many people, which makes me feel more energized.

Can expresses a usual or present ability in this context. Could usually refers to past ability or a more tentative possibility, so it does not fit this general present-time statement.

× Not really. However, especially in the morning I sometimes feel tired because if I stay up late the last night I would feel hard to get up in the morning, but during the day I often feel energetic because I often give myself a cup of coffee in the morning to help me open that day and when I leave the house, I could enjoy under the sunlight and also engage in meeting with many people and it makes me more energized.

✓ Not really. However, I sometimes feel tired in the morning because, if I stay up late the night before, I find it hard to get up. During the day, I often feel energetic because I have a cup of coffee in the morning. When I leave the house, I can enjoy the sunlight and meet many people, which makes me feel more energized.

We say enjoy the sunlight, not enjoy under the sunlight. The verb enjoy is directly followed by its object and does not need the preposition under in this sentence.

× I often feel tired, especially when the morning and the evening. When the morning I found out it is more difficult to get up if I stay up late last night and for the evening if I had a hard working day I would easily feel very tired because I have used all my energy in the day.

✓ I often feel tired, especially in the morning and in the evening. In the morning, I find it more difficult to get up if I stay up late the night before. In the evening, if I have had a hard day at work, I easily feel tired because I have used up all my energy during the day.

Use in before parts of the day: in the morning and in the evening. Also, during the day is the natural prepositional phrase for a period of time within one day.

× I often feel tired, especially when the morning and the evening. When the morning I found out it is more difficult to get up if I stay up late last night and for the evening if I had a hard working day I would easily feel very tired because I have used all my energy in the day.

✓ I often feel tired, especially in the morning and in the evening. In the morning, I find it more difficult to get up if I stay up late the night before. In the evening, if I have had a hard day at work, I easily feel tired because I have used up all my energy during the day.

The question asks about a regular situation, so the present tense is needed. Use find instead of found out because you are describing a usual experience, not one specific past event.

× I usually force myself to stand up and to work when I feel very tired. Keep sitting on the chair makes the tiredness more strengthened. So I usually stand up and find a place that I can work quietly to keep myself motivated.

✓ I usually force myself to stand up and work when I feel very tired. Sitting in a chair makes me feel even more tired. Therefore, I usually stand up and find a place where I can work quietly to keep myself motivated.

When a verb phrase is used as the subject of a sentence, it should normally take the -ing form. Use sitting, not keep sitting. The gerund phrase Sitting in a chair functions as the subject of the sentence.

× I usually force myself to stand up and to work when I feel very tired. Keep sitting on the chair makes the tiredness more strengthened. So I usually stand up and find a place that I can work quietly to keep myself motivated.

✓ I usually force myself to stand up and work when I feel very tired. Sitting in a chair makes me feel even more tired. Therefore, I usually stand up and find a place where I can work quietly to keep myself motivated.

More strengthened is not a natural adjective phrase here. Use even more tired to describe how you feel. When describing a person’s condition, tired is more appropriate than strengthened.

× Well, it depends on who the friends invite me were.

✓ Well, it depends on which friends invite me.

The original sentence incorrectly combines who, the friends, invite me, and were. Use the structure it depends on which friends invite me when identifying the people who may invite you.

× If they are my best friend, even I'm tired, I would go there because we seldom have a lot of time to gather.

✓ If they are my best friends, even if I am tired, I would go because we seldom have much time to get together.

The pronoun they refers to more than one person, so the noun should be plural: best friends. Make the noun and pronoun agree in number.

× If they are my best friend, even I'm tired, I would go there because we seldom have a lot of time to gather.

✓ If they are my best friends, even if I am tired, I would go because we seldom have much time to get together.

Even must be followed by if when introducing a condition or contrast. The correct conjunction is even if I am tired, not even I am tired.

× However, if it is the less important friend, I would ask if I can skip for the meeting or the dating a day because I think it is more important for me to get well rest.

✓ However, if it is a less important friend, I would ask if I could skip the meeting or postpone the date for a day because I think it is more important for me to get enough rest.

Use a before less important friend because this refers to one non-specific friend. The definite article the is used when the listener already knows exactly which person or thing you mean.

× However, if it is the less important friend, I would ask if I can skip for the meeting or the dating a day because I think it is more important for me to get well rest.

✓ However, if it is a less important friend, I would ask if I could skip the meeting or postpone the date for a day because I think it is more important for me to get enough rest.

Skip is normally used directly with an object, so say skip the meeting, not skip for the meeting. To express a delay, use postpone the date for a day.

× However, if it is the less important friend, I would ask if I can skip for the meeting or the dating a day because I think it is more important for me to get well rest.

✓ However, if it is a less important friend, I would ask if I could skip the meeting or postpone the date for a day because I think it is more important for me to get enough rest.

Well is an adverb and cannot directly describe the noun rest in this expression. Use enough rest to describe the sufficient amount of rest you need, or say rest well if you want to use well as an adverb.