Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 【文法・自然さ】「after I finished the class」は一般的な習慣なので「after I finish class」とし、「meeting my friend with my friend too much feels me exhausted」は「meeting my friends too often makes me feel exhausted」のように修正しましょう。また、「for example」と「also」の重複を避け、答えを「結論 → 理由・具体例」の順に整理すると、より自然で効果的です。

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a long day of classes. I also feel exhausted when I meet my friends too often because I do not get enough time to rest.

Sugestão: 【文法・語彙】「studied English hards」は「study English hard」または「study English for a long time」、「felt achievement」は「feel a sense of achievement」、「use a brain lot」は「use my brain a lot」と言い換えましょう。質問は「いつ疲れるか」を尋ねているため、大学の授業後や英語を長時間勉強した後という時間・状況を明確に示し、理由を1つ具体的に説明するとよいです。

Exemplo: I usually feel tired after my university classes, especially when I have several lectures in one day. I also get tired after studying English for a long time because I have to concentrate and use my brain a lot. However, I feel a sense of achievement afterward.

Sugestão: 【文法・構成】「It is it takes ten minutes a work」は「It takes about ten minutes to walk around my university」と修正し、「drink coffee」は「buy my favorite coffee drink」としましょう。散歩と飲み物を選ぶという2つの行動を、順序を示す「Then」や理由を示す「because」でつなぐと、内容がより明確になります。

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take a ten-minute walk around my university because it helps me relax. Then, I buy my favorite coffee drink and take a short break before returning to my studies.

Sugestão: 【文法・自然さ】「Yes, I think so」は「Yes, I usually do」と直接答え、「makes me feel relaxing」は「helps me relax」または「makes me feel relaxed」としましょう。「reflect my feelings」はこの文脈では「talk about my feelings」の方が自然です。友達と会話することで気分転換になるという理由を、2〜3文で簡潔に説明すると効果的です。

Exemplo: Yes, I usually do, although I may choose a quiet place if I am very tired. Talking with my friends helps me relax, and I can talk about my feelings with them. After that, I usually feel refreshed.

× after I finished the class I feel tired

✓ after I finish class, I feel tired

The student is describing a regular situation, so the present tense finish is needed instead of the past tense finished. Class can be used without an article when referring to classes in general.

× meeting my friend with my friend too much feels me exhausted

✓ meeting my friends too often makes me feel exhausted

The structure feel me exhausted is incorrect. Use make + object + feel + adjective. Too often is the correct adverbial expression for frequency, and meeting my friend with my friend is unnecessarily repetitive.

× I studied English hards and I felt achievement but tired

✓ When I study English hard, I feel accomplished but tired

The answer describes a usual experience, so study and feel should be in the present tense. Hard is the adverb that modifies study, while hards is incorrect. Accomplished is the adjective needed to describe how the speaker feels.

× I studied English hards

✓ I study English hard

Hard is an adverb in this sentence because it describes how the student studies. Hards is not correct here. Do not add -s to hard when it is used as an adverb.

× I use a brain lot

✓ I use my brain a lot

The possessive pronoun my is needed because the speaker is referring to their own brain. The expression a lot must be written as two words and is used to mean frequently or greatly.

× It is it takes ten minutes a work

✓ It takes ten minutes to walk around the university

The original sentence contains an unnecessary It is and uses an incorrect structure. Use It takes + amount of time + to + verb. The phrase to walk explains what takes ten minutes.

× Yes, I think so I want to talk with my friends and that makes me feel relaxing and also I can reflect my feelings and that is effective to

✓ Yes, I think so. I want to talk with my friends, which makes me feel relaxed. I can also reflect on my feelings, and that is effective.

The original response joins several independent ideas without proper sentence boundaries. Use periods and commas to make the structure clear. The final phrase effective to is incomplete, so effective is sufficient here.

× that makes me feel relaxing

✓ that makes me feel relaxed

Relaxed describes the speaker's emotional state, so the past participle adjective relaxed is needed. Relaxing describes something that causes relaxation, such as a relaxing activity.

× I can reflect my feelings

✓ I can reflect on my feelings

The verb reflect requires the preposition on when it means to think carefully about something. Therefore, reflect on my feelings is the correct expression.