Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答直接，原因也比较具体，但有明显语法问题：应说“Since graduating, I have been staying at home”，以及“doing all the housework takes me”。“8 to 10 hours per day”略显夸张，建议用更自然的表达，如“several hours a day”。避免用“And”单独连接句子，可以用“because”或“as a result”增强逻辑。

Exemplo: Yes, I have been feeling tired quite often recently. Since graduating, I have been staying at home and doing most of the housework myself. It usually takes several hours a day, so I often feel physically exhausted.

Sugestão: 回答包含具体时间和拖地的例子，但重复、停顿和自我纠正较多，影响流利度。“about lunch time”应改为“around lunchtime”，“the middle time of the day”不自然。可以先给出主题句，再用一个简洁原因解释；不需要反复描述清洗拖把的过程。

Exemplo: I usually feel tired around lunchtime. By then, I have often finished chores such as mopping the floor, which can take about an hour. After doing physical work all morning, I normally need a short break.

Sugestão: 回答有清晰的做法和结果，但“as we all know”没有必要，而且“put up my earphones”应改为“put on my earphones”。“the classical music or the pop music”应说“classical or pop music”；“makes me feel energetic and gives me more energy”表达更自然。建议减少重复，使用“which”连接结果。

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually put on my earphones and listen to some music. I enjoy both classical and pop music, depending on my mood. It helps me relax and gives me enough energy to finish the rest of the housework.

Sugestão: 开头“It depends”很好，但后半部分有较多重复和未完成表达。“rank the tightness”应改为“rate my tiredness”，并且“if it above”应为“if it is above”。注意时态和主语一致：应说“I would stay at home”，而不是“we’ll have a rest”。可以清楚说明评分标准以及在家做什么。

Exemplo: It depends on how tired I am. If I rate my tiredness at seven or above out of ten, I usually stay at home instead of meeting my friends. I might read a book or do some painting so that I can relax and recover.

× I often feel tired recently because after graduation I still at home.

✓ I often feel tired these days because, after graduating, I am still at home.

“I still at home”缺少系动词“am”。“at home”是介词短语，不能单独作谓语。描述目前的状态时，应使用“I am still at home”。另外，“these days”比“recently”更适合描述目前一段时间的状态。

× Doing all the housework take me about 8 to 10 hours per day.

✓ Doing all the housework takes me about 8 to 10 hours per day.

“Doing all the housework”是动名词短语，整体作主语时看作单数，所以谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“takes”，而不是“take”。

× About lunchtime, I will feel tired because it's the middle it, it's the middle time of the day.

✓ I feel tired around lunchtime because it is the middle of the day.

题目询问的是通常什么时候感到疲劳，因此应使用一般现在时“I feel”，而不是“will feel”。“the middle it”结构错误，应改为“the middle of the day”。

× About lunchtime, I will feel tired because it's the middle it, it's the middle time of the day.

✓ I feel tired around lunchtime because it is the middle of the day.

原句中“it's the middle it”以及重复的“it's the middle time”造成句子结构不完整且重复。应直接使用完整结构“it is the middle of the day”。

× I've just finished my mopping floor work.

✓ I've just finished mopping the floor.

“finish”后面通常接动名词（动词-ing形式），所以应使用“finish mopping”。“mopping floor work”不是自然的英语结构；“mopping the floor”表示“拖地”。

× I have to wash the mop and again.

✓ I have to wash the mop again.

副词“again”应放在动词短语之后，即“wash the mop again”。原句中的“and again”连接不完整，也导致副词位置不自然。

× I will put up my earphones and try to listen to some music.

✓ I will put on my earphones and try to listen to some music.

表示“戴上耳机”时，应使用短语“put on”，而“put up”通常表示“张贴、举起”或“建造”，不符合这里的意思。

× That makes me will, that will, makes me feel energetic and more energy to do the housework.

✓ That will make me feel energetic and give me more energy to do the housework.

“make”后面应接“宾语+动词原形”，所以应说“make me feel”，不能说“makes me will”或“makes me feel”后再直接接“more energy”。这里需要并列两个动词：“make me feel energetic and give me more energy”。

× If it above 6 or 7, I would not choose to go out with my friend.

✓ If it is above 6 or 7, I would not choose to go out with my friends.

条件从句“If it above 6 or 7”缺少系动词“is”，应改为“If it is above 6 or 7”。“above 6 or 7”表示数值超过6或7，必须使用“be”动词连接主语和形容词/介词短语。

× If it is above 6 or 7, I would not choose to go out with my friend and we'll have a rest at home.

✓ If it is above 6 or 7, I would not choose to go out with my friends, and I would rest at home.

这是以“If”引导的虚拟或假设情况，主句使用“would”，因此后面的并列内容也应保持一致，使用“I would rest”，不能突然改用“we'll”。同时，主语前面是“I”，所以应继续使用“I”，而不是“we”。

× And do some reading maybe and painting and kind of to.

✓ I might do some reading or painting at home.

原句包含多个重复的“and”，最后的“kind of to”也没有完整意义，导致句子结构不完整。可以用并列名词“reading or painting”，并补充主语和谓语，使句子成为完整表达。