Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid repeating the idea of feeling tired. Use the natural noun phrase “severe fatigue” rather than “a very severe fatigue and exhaustion issue.” Also, “despite that” is awkward here; use “even though” or “although.” You could add a specific reason, such as poor sleep or a busy schedule, instead of making a general statement.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially because I do not always get enough sleep. Although I do not exercise much, I still feel exhausted after a long day of studying.

Sugestão: The answer is repetitive and contains an unclear phrase, “during the long time.” Answer the question with a clear time expression, such as “in the afternoon” or “after lunch,” and then explain why. Avoid exaggerations like “without any exceptions at all,” because they sound unnatural and overly absolute.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired in the afternoon, especially after lunch. I sometimes struggle to concentrate at that time because I did not sleep very well the night before.

Sugestão: Use “listen to music” rather than “listen to the music I like” in this context, and replace the incorrect phrase “slip on the bed” with “lie down on the bed” or “take a nap.” The list of junk food is unnecessary and slightly reduces coherence. Organize the answer with a linking word such as “usually” or “if I am still exhausted.”

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually listen to some relaxing music and lie down for a while. If I am extremely exhausted, I take a short nap, which helps me feel more refreshed.

Sugestão: The answer is relevant and gives a clear contrast, but “on most cases cases” should be “in most cases,” and “there’s not much to talk to friends” is unnatural. Say “I do not feel like talking to my friends” or “I do not have much energy to socialize.” Add a specific exception to make the response more developed and natural.

Exemplo: I occasionally go out with my friends, but in most cases, I prefer to stay at home. When I am tired, I do not have much energy to socialize; however, I might still meet them if it is a special occasion.

× I have a very severe fatigue and exhaustion issue, despite that I don't exercise much throughout the day.

✓ I have a very severe fatigue and exhaustion issue, although I don't exercise much throughout the day.

Despite is normally followed by a noun, noun phrase, or gerund, such as despite my lack of exercise. Because the following part contains a subject and a verb, although is the appropriate conjunction here.

× I would feel tired in the morning, during the long time as well as the afternoon and evening, I feel tired throughout the day, without any exceptions at all.

✓ I would feel tired in the morning, in the afternoon, and in the evening. I would feel tired throughout the day, without any exceptions.

The phrase during the long time is not used correctly in this context. Use in the morning, in the afternoon, and in the evening to identify times of day. To describe an extended period, use for a long time.

× I would feel tired in the morning, during the long time as well as the afternoon and evening, I feel tired throughout the day, without any exceptions at all.

✓ I would feel tired in the morning, in the afternoon, and in the evening. I would feel tired throughout the day, without any exceptions.

The original sentence joins several complete ideas with commas, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into two sentences, or connect them with an appropriate conjunction.

× I occasionally do, but on most cases cases, I don't.

✓ I occasionally do, but in most cases, I don't.

The standard preposition used with cases is in, not on. Also, cases is repeated unnecessarily; use the word only once.

× There's not much to talk to friends and to do with friends while I'm feeling tired.

✓ There isn't much to talk about with my friends or do with them while I'm feeling tired.

Talk about is used when referring to a subject or topic. Talk to means to speak to a person, so it does not fit the intended meaning here. With my friends is the appropriate phrase for describing the people involved.

× There's not much to talk to friends and to do with friends while I'm feeling tired.

✓ There isn't much to talk about with my friends or do with them while I'm feeling tired.

The original sentence has an unclear and unbalanced structure because talk to friends and to do with friends are not parallel expressions. Use talk about with my friends or do with them to make the two activities grammatically parallel.