Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly and explain your work more clearly. Avoid the redundant phrase “jobs work” and use a natural expression such as “housework.” Also, “I have lots of clothes at home” does not clearly explain why you feel tired; connect it to a specific task, such as washing or folding clothes. Add one precise detail to make your answer more effective.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired because I have a lot of work to do. In addition to my job, I have to do housework, such as washing and folding clothes. As a result, I do not have much time to relax.

Sugestão: Use a natural time expression, such as “when” or “especially when,” instead of “at times that.” The correct preposition is “in my shop,” not “on my shop,” and “serve customers” is more natural than “attend customers” in this context. Give a specific result, such as working continuously or standing for several hours.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired when a lot of customers come into my shop, especially during the evening rush. I have to serve them continuously and answer all their questions. By the end of the day, I feel completely exhausted.

Sugestão: State your action clearly and use correct grammar. Say “hold my phone in my hand,” not “put my phone on my hand,” and use “sit on a chair” and “scroll through my phone.” Avoid “I scrolling”; use “I scroll” after “I.” Organize the answer with a linking word and explain why this helps you relax.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually sit on a chair and scroll through my phone for a while. I might watch short videos or check my messages. This helps me relax before I get back to work.

Sugestão: Give a clear negative answer and avoid repetition and hesitation, such as “What,” “I,” and “rather.” Use the structure “I prefer to sleep rather than go out,” not “rather to go out.” You can add a brief reason and a contrast to make the response more complete and natural.

Exemplo: No, not usually. When I feel tired, I prefer to stay at home and sleep rather than go out with my friends. I can meet them another day when I have more energy.

× I have lots of clothes at home and I have to do my jobs work also.

✓ I have lots of clothes at home, and I also have to do my housework.

Jobs work is not a correct noun phrase in English. Housework is an uncountable noun that refers to tasks such as washing clothes and cleaning. Do not combine jobs and work in this way.

× I feel tired at times that lots of customers come on my shop and I have to attend all of them.

✓ I feel tired when lots of customers come to my shop and I have to attend to all of them.

Use come to a shop, not come on a shop. Also, attend to means to help or serve a customer, while attend alone usually means to go to an event or place.

× I feel tired at times that lots of customers come on my shop and I have to attend all of them.

✓ I feel tired when lots of customers come to my shop and I have to attend to all of them.

When is the appropriate conjunction for introducing a time clause. At times that is not natural in this sentence. You can also say I feel tired when many customers come to my shop.

× So basically when I feel tired I put my phone on my hand and I sit on chair in relaxing position and I scrolling this

✓ Basically, when I feel tired, I hold my phone in my hand, sit on a chair in a relaxed position, and scroll through it.

Use in my hand when holding a phone. The phrase sit on a chair requires the preposition on and an article before chair. Use scroll through it when referring to the content on a phone.

× So basically when I feel tired I put my phone on my hand and I sit on chair in relaxing position and I scrolling this

✓ Basically, when I feel tired, I hold my phone in my hand, sit on a chair in a relaxed position, and scroll through it.

Singular countable nouns usually need an article. Use a chair and a relaxed position, not chair and relaxing position without an article.

× So basically when I feel tired I put my phone on my hand and I sit on chair in relaxing position and I scrolling this

✓ Basically, when I feel tired, I hold my phone in my hand, sit on a chair in a relaxed position, and scroll through it.

Relaxing describes something that causes relaxation, such as a relaxing activity. Relaxed describes a person's state or position, so a relaxed position is the appropriate expression here.

× So basically when I feel tired I put my phone on my hand and I sit on chair in relaxing position and I scrolling this

✓ Basically, when I feel tired, I hold my phone in my hand, sit on a chair in a relaxed position, and scroll through it.

The subject I cannot be followed directly by scrolling. In this sentence, use the simple present scroll because you are describing a usual action. Keep the verbs parallel: hold, sit, and scroll.

× Not at all What When I feel tired I I prefer to sleep, rather rather to go out with friends and chill with them.

✓ Not at all. When I feel tired, I prefer to sleep rather than go out with my friends and relax with them.

The words What and the repeated word rather make the sentence structurally incorrect. Separate Not at all into its own sentence, remove the repeated subject I, and use the pattern prefer to sleep rather than go out.

× Not at all What When I feel tired I I prefer to sleep, rather rather to go out with friends and chill with them.

✓ Not at all. When I feel tired, I prefer to sleep rather than go out with my friends and relax with them.

The subject pronoun I is repeated unnecessarily. Use I only once before prefer. Repeated pronouns can make the sentence unclear and grammatically incorrect.