Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và có đưa ra lý do, nhưng câu cuối có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ chưa tự nhiên: “do do” bị lặp, “take note informed” không đúng cấu trúc, và “many much information” dùng sai lượng từ. Hãy diễn đạt rõ hơn rằng bạn mệt vì phải học nhiều, ghi chép nhiều thông tin hoặc tập thể dục. Nên dùng một câu chủ đề và một câu giải thích cụ thể, tránh thêm những từ không cần thiết.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired after school because I have to study for several hours and take a lot of notes. Sometimes, I also do exercise, which makes me feel even more exhausted.

Sugestão: Bạn đã trả lời đúng thời điểm và đưa ra lý do, nhưng “complex many lesson” và “meni exercise” không đúng từ vựng hoặc cấu trúc. Có thể bạn muốn nói “complete many lessons and exercises”. Hãy dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên “I feel tired after...” và kiểm tra danh từ số nhiều như “lessons” và “exercises”. Bạn cũng nên thêm một chi tiết cụ thể, chẳng hạn thời gian làm bài hoặc cảm giác sau khi hoàn thành.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired after doing my homework, especially when I have to complete several difficult lessons and exercises. It can take me two or three hours, so I often need a short break afterward.

Sugestão: Bạn nêu được hoạt động và tác dụng của hoạt động đó, nhưng câu trả lời bị lặp “I usually listen to music” và thiếu dấu nối giữa các ý. “Releasing music” không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này; nên dùng “relaxing music” hoặc “soft music”. Hãy kết hợp các ý bằng “because” hoặc “which helps me...” và đảm bảo chủ ngữ - động từ phù hợp: “it helps” khi nói về music.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually listen to soft, relaxing music. It helps me calm down and forget about my schoolwork for a while. Sometimes, I also lie down for a short rest.

Sugestão: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp “Yes” và cố gắng cung cấp hoạt động cùng bạn bè, nhưng có nhiều cụm từ chưa tự nhiên và thiếu dấu câu. “work around my town” có thể được sửa thành “walk around my town”, còn “go the path to enjoy the bread” chưa rõ nghĩa; nếu muốn nói đi dạo và ăn bánh mì, hãy dùng “walk along the street and enjoy some bread”. Hãy dùng danh từ số nhiều “friends” nếu nói chung và sắp xếp câu theo trình tự rõ ràng: đi đâu, làm gì và vì sao việc đó giúp bạn bớt mệt.

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes go out with my friends even when I feel tired. We usually walk around my town, chat about our day, and buy some snacks. Spending time with them helps me relax and feel more energetic.

× This is because I have to do do more exercise and take note informed many much information.

✓ This is because I have to do more exercise and take notes on a lot of information.

The verb do is unnecessarily repeated. After have to, use the base form do only once. The phrase take note informed is not grammatically correct; use take notes on information instead.

× This is because I have to do do more exercise and take note informed many much information.

✓ This is because I have to do more exercise and take notes on a lot of information.

Information is an uncountable noun, so it cannot be used with many. Use much information or, more naturally here, a lot of information.

× This is because I have to do do more exercise and take note informed many much information.

✓ This is because I have to do more exercise and take notes on a lot of information.

The correct preposition after notes is on. The phrase take notes on something means to write or remember important information about it.

× I really feel tired after doing my homework because I have to complex many lesson and meni exercise.

✓ I really feel tired after doing my homework because I have to complete many lessons and many exercises.

Many must be followed by plural countable nouns. Therefore, lesson becomes lessons and exercise becomes exercises. Also, complete is the correct verb in this context, not complex.

× When I feel tired, I usually listen to releasing music this is because they are pleasant and soft it helps me feel relaxed.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually listen to relaxing music because it is pleasant and soft, and it helps me feel relaxed.

Relaxing describes music that makes a person feel calm. Releasing does not have the intended meaning here. Present participles used as adjectives should accurately describe the effect or function of the noun.

× When I feel tired, I usually listen to releasing music this is because they are pleasant and soft it helps me feel relaxed.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually listen to relaxing music because it is pleasant and soft, and it helps me feel relaxed.

Music is an uncountable singular noun, so it must be referred to with the singular pronoun it, not the plural pronoun they.

× When I feel tired, I usually listen to releasing music this is because they are pleasant and soft it helps me feel relaxed.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually listen to relaxing music because it is pleasant and soft, and it helps me feel relaxed.

Several independent ideas were joined without appropriate punctuation or a conjunction. Use because to connect the reason and and to connect the two descriptions of the music.

× Yes, I usually go out with my friend to work around my town and talk together We usually go the path to enjoy the bread.

✓ Yes, I usually go out with my friend to walk around my town and talk together. We usually go along the path to enjoy the view.

The expression go the path is incomplete. Use go along the path or go on the path. A suitable preposition is needed to show movement along a route.

× Yes, I usually go out with my friend to work around my town and talk together We usually go the path to enjoy the bread.

✓ Yes, I usually go out with my friend to walk around my town and talk together. We usually go along the path to enjoy the view.

Two complete sentences were joined without a full stop. Separate them with appropriate punctuation. Also, use the infinitive walk after to when describing the purpose of going out.