Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, mention specific causes and give one or two short strategies. Avoid redundancy and fix tense/word order errors (e.g., "study late into the night").

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, particularly during exam periods. For example, when I study late into the night for several days in a row, I become exhausted and stressed. To cope, I take short breaks, limit my study sessions to 90 minutes, and aim for seven hours of sleep each night.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail or example. Correct phrasing (e.g., "I feel tired mainly because of my studies and exam pressure") and avoid trailing off. Use linking words like "because" or "when" to clarify cause and time.

Exemplo: I feel tired mainly because of my studies and the pressure of upcoming exams. For instance, during the two weeks before finals I often study ten hours a day, which leaves me mentally and physically drained.

Sugestão: Provide a direct topic sentence then give a specific routine and reason. Fix grammar and awkward phrases ("in the morning" not "morning time", "a nearby park"), and use a linking phrase to explain the benefit.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually go to the nearby park, especially in the morning. Being outdoors and walking for twenty minutes helps me relax and refresh my mind, so I can study more effectively afterward.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a concise reason with a specific example. Improve sentence accuracy and use plural where appropriate ("friends"), and add a brief example of an activity that helps your mood.

Exemplo: Yes, I still go out with my friends when I'm tired because their company cheers me up quickly. For example, meeting a friend for coffee or a short walk usually lifts my mood and helps me forget stress.

× Whenever I study later into night I feel very tired and stressed so I take.

✓ Whenever I study late into the night, I feel very tired and stressed, so I take a short break.

The original uses incorrect verb form and word choice: 'study later into night' is unnatural. Use the -ing/adj form 'late' and include the article 'the' before 'night'. Also the sentence ends abruptly with 'so I take.' which lacks an object; add 'a short break' to complete the meaning. Suggestion: say 'study late into the night' and complete the clause after 'so I take'.

× So I try to take a short break and get more sleep to recover.

✓ So I try to take short breaks and get more sleep to recover.

Using 'a short break' is not wrong but inconsistent with habitual 'I try' — plural 'short breaks' better expresses repeated action. The original is acceptable but improving parallelism and habit indication is clearer. Use plural when referring to repeated instances.

× Mostly I feel tired because of my studies and a lot of pressure over my exams and.

✓ Mostly I feel tired because of my studies and a lot of pressure from my exams.

The sentence ends with an extraneous 'and' and uses incorrect preposition 'over' with 'pressure'. Use 'pressure from my exams' and remove the dangling 'and' to complete the sentence structure.

× Whenever I feel tired, especially in the morning time, I prefer to go outside such as a park nearby my home.

✓ Whenever I feel tired, especially in the morning, I prefer to go outside to a park near my home.

Use 'to' when indicating destination ('go to a park') and 'near my home' is the correct prepositional phrase (not 'nearby my home'). Also 'morning time' is redundant; 'morning' is preferred.

× I feel very relaxed to for going there.

✓ I feel very relaxed when I go there.

The phrase 'relaxed to for going there' is ungrammatical. Use 'when I go there' to link the action to the feeling. 'Feel relaxed' takes a clause like 'when I go there' or an infinitive 'to go there' but not both; here 'when I go there' is natural.

× Yes, I still go out with my friends whenever I feel tired because my friend can change my mood in a minute, so I prefer to stay with them.

✓ Yes, I still go out with my friends whenever I feel tired because my friends can change my mood in a minute, so I prefer to stay with them.

Pronoun/noun number mismatch: 'my friend' (singular) conflicts with 'my friends' earlier and with 'them' (plural). Use 'my friends' consistently. Also 'in a minute' is idiomatic but 'in a minute' or 'quickly' both work.