Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Use linking words (because, so) and correct phrasing (e.g. "stay up late on my phone"). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired because I often stay up late on my phone watching videos. So I try to manage my time better and aim to be in bed by ten o'clock.

Sugestão: Correct word choice and grammar and give a clearer time frame. Begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g. "I usually feel tired on days when I have university"). Then add specific supporting details and a linking word like "because". Avoid vague phrases and check tense and articles.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired on days when I have university because I have a lot of coursework and often get insufficient sleep the night before.

Sugestão: Organize into one clear main idea and concise supporting details. Use a linking word to connect the general activity to examples (for example/for instance). Keep sentences natural and avoid splitting into too many short sentences.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually rest by doing low-effort activities; for example, I play a mobile game like Brawl Stars or watch a few videos on YouTube or Netflix.

Sugestão: Make your response grammatically correct and clearer. Start with a direct yes/no and add a brief reason using linking words (because/to). Use correct expressions ("to calm down and get some fresh air", "city centre"). Keep it to two sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still go out because it helps me calm down and get some fresh air. I usually go to the park or to the city centre with my friends.

× Yes I often feel tired that's because I frequently stay late playing my phone or watching YouTube I know what I need to do with this. I need to manage my time well and go to sleep around ten o'clock.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired. That's because I frequently stay up late playing on my phone or watching YouTube. I know what I need to do about this: I need to manage my time well and go to sleep around ten o'clock.

Error type 10: 'playing my phone' incorrectly uses the verb without the preposition 'on' and the sentence run-on lacks punctuation. Use 'stay up late' for being awake late. Add commas and split into sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'playing on my phone' and separate clauses with periods or commas.

× I usually filter during the days when I have my university.

✓ I usually feel tired during the days when I have university.

Error type 13: 'filter' is a wrong word form (probably a typo) and 'my university' is unnatural here. Use the verb 'feel' and 'have university' or 'have classes' to express attending university that day. Suggestion: say 'feel tired on days when I have university' or 'on days when I have classes'.

× That's because I have pretty a lot of work to do and I don't have enough sleep before it

✓ That's because I have a lot of work to do, and I don't get enough sleep beforehand.

Error type 14: 'pretty a lot' is incorrect word order; 'pretty' is an adverb that should precede an adjective, not inserted before 'a lot'. Also 'don't have enough sleep before it' is awkward; use 'don't get enough sleep beforehand'. Suggestion: use 'a lot of work' and 'get enough sleep beforehand'.

× When I feel tired I prefer to have a rest. Usually I play video games.

✓ When I feel tired, I prefer to rest. Usually, I play video games.

Error type 26: 'have a rest' is acceptable but 'prefer to rest' is more natural. Missing commas after introductory clauses. Suggestion: add commas and use concise phrasing: 'prefer to rest'.

× For example, my favorite game is Brawl Stars and sometimes I watch YouTube or Netflix.

✓ For example, my favorite game is Brawl Stars, and sometimes I watch videos on YouTube or Netflix.

Error type 22: 'watch YouTube or Netflix' is understandable but better to say 'watch videos on YouTube or Netflix' to use proper collocation. Add comma before 'and' in a compound sentence. Suggestion: include 'videos on'.

× Yes, and it was all the way to calm down and take on wind I like to go to the park with my friends or just to city centre.

✓ Yes, and it helps me calm down and unwind. I like to go to the park with my friends or just go to the city centre.

Error type 11: 'it was all the way to calm down and take on wind' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'it helps me calm down and unwind'. 'Take on wind' is incorrect. Also 'to city centre' needs the article 'the' for British English: 'the city centre'. Suggestion: replace with 'helps me calm down and unwind' and use 'the city centre' or 'downtown' depending on variety.