Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (plural/singular, article use, verb forms) and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: It depends. Sometimes I get tired when I walk a lot and don’t rest, but I feel energetic when I sleep well and exercise regularly.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail or brief example using a linking word. Fix grammar (use 'have little sleep' vs 'have a little sleep') and contractions/negatives appropriately for clarity.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired when I have little sleep. For example, after staying up late studying, I feel sleepy and unmotivated to get out of bed in the morning.

Sugestão: Use present simple for habitual actions, keep sentences short, and use correct verbs and collocations (e.g., 'pour a cup of coffee', 'wake myself up', 'rest my mind' or 'clear my mind'). Use linking words like 'first' and 'then' correctly and avoid unclear words like 'empathy my mind'.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I first make a cup of coffee to wake myself up. Then I sit quietly for a few minutes to rest and clear my mind before continuing.

× It depends, sometimes I easily feel tired because I walk too much and rest a little, but sometime I feel energetic because I have a plenty of sleep and exercise a lot.

✓ It depends; sometimes I easily feel tired because I walk too much and rest a little, but sometimes I feel energetic because I have plenty of sleep and exercise a lot.

The phrase 'a plenty of' is incorrect; 'plenty' does not need the article 'a' when used with uncountable nouns. Also 'sometime' (once) vs 'sometimes' (occasionally) is incorrect in the second clause. Use 'sometimes' for repeated occasions. Minor punctuation improved for clarity.

× I often feel tired when I only have a little sleep that makes me feel sleepy and don't want to move in the morning.

✓ I often feel tired when I only have a little sleep, which makes me feel sleepy and not want to move in the morning.

The relative clause needs 'which' to refer to the situation and the verb forms must agree: use 'not want' rather than 'don't want' after 'which makes me feel sleepy'. Also 'a little sleep' is acceptable but the clause should be connected correctly for clarity.

× When I felt tired, my first reaction was always pour a cup of coffee, try to wake up myself and second I would sit in a place and empathy my mind to wake up

✓ When I feel tired, my first reaction is always to pour a cup of coffee and try to wake myself up; secondly, I sit somewhere and focus my mind to wake up.

Tense consistency: the question asks about habitual actions, so present simple ('feel', 'is') should be used instead of past ('felt', 'was'). Infinitive form 'to pour' is required after 'reaction is always'. 'Wake up myself' is incorrect word order; use 'wake myself up'. 'Empathy my mind' is wrong word choice; 'empathize' is not transitive in this context — use 'focus my mind' or 'clear my mind'. Also improve sequence wording: 'secondly' and punctuation for clarity.