Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity, sentence accuracy and conciseness. Correct the time phrasing (should be 10 PM, 7 AM), use one clear topic sentence then briefly add a specific supporting reason. Avoid redundancy like "in the evening" plus AM/PM confusion and repeated 'days'. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because', 'however').

Exemplo: No, I don't often feel tired. I usually go to bed at 10 PM and wake up at 7 AM, so I have enough rest. However, I sometimes feel tired after particularly busy or stressful days because I have extra tasks to finish.

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give concise details with correct word order and punctuation. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to show cause. Correct awkward phrasing ('week one of the month we're in') to 'the first week of each month'.

Exemplo: I feel tired mainly on stressful days. For example, during the first week of each month I have to file taxes and complete several compliance tasks, which leaves me exhausted by the end of the day.

Sugestão: Organize the answer with a topic sentence followed by two or three concise, specific activities. Use correct articles and pluralization ('a good movie' or 'good movies'), and add linking words like 'then' or 'after that'. Avoid listing too many items; choose representative examples with brief reasons.

Exemplo: When I'm tired, I relax with a long bath and then watch a good movie to calm my mind. I also treat myself to comfort food—for instance, fried chicken—because it helps me unwind after a stressful day.

× I actually sleep very early in the evening around ten AM and wake up seven AM in the morning so I usually feel energetic but there are times wherein I feel tired, especially for busy days and stressful days.

✓ I actually go to sleep very early, around ten PM, and wake up at seven AM, so I usually feel energetic, but there are times when I feel tired, especially on busy or stressful days.

Use 'go to sleep' instead of 'sleep' for the action of beginning sleep; use 'PM' not 'AM' for ten in the evening; include the preposition 'at' with times ('at seven AM'); replace 'in the morning' (redundant with 'seven AM'); use 'when' instead of 'wherein' in this context; use 'on' with 'days' and avoid repeating 'days' after adjectives. Suggestions: say 'go to sleep', use correct AM/PM, add 'at' before times, use 'when' for occasions, and 'on busy or stressful days'.

× Usually week one of the month we're in I have a lot of taxes to file compliances and duties to make sure are covered.

✓ Usually in the first week of the month I'm in, I have a lot of taxes to file, compliances to complete, and duties to make sure are covered.

The sentence has unclear phrasing and missing prepositions. Use 'in the first week of the month' and contracted 'I'm in' or better omit 'in' entirely: 'in the first week of the month I have...'. Use parallel gerund or infinitive phrases: 'taxes to file' and 'compliances to complete'. Add commas to separate items. Suggestions: reorder to 'Usually in the first week of the month I have a lot of taxes to file, compliances to complete, and duties to ensure are covered' or '...and duties to ensure are covered.'

× Whenever I feel tired, I usually take long baths, I treat myself with some good food, maybe fried chicken, and then indulge myself with good movie that calms my mind and releases my tension.

✓ Whenever I feel tired, I usually take long baths, treat myself to some good food, maybe fried chicken, and then indulge in a good movie that calms my mind and relieves my tension.

Use parallel verb forms (remove repeated subject 'I' after a comma or use separate sentences). Use 'treat myself to' not 'treat myself with'. Use 'indulge in a movie' rather than 'indulge myself with good movie'; add article 'a' before 'good movie'. Use 'relieves' instead of 'releases' for stress/tension. Suggestions: keep verbs parallel (take, treat, indulge), use correct prepositions ('to' and 'in'), include articles, and choose correct verbs ('relieve').

× I definitely feel tired on stressful days.

✓ I definitely feel tired on stressful days.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. It correctly uses 'on' with 'days' and present simple to describe a habitual reaction. Suggestion: none.