Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/repetition errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'hours hours') and refine phrases like 'work from home set up' to 'work-from-home setup.'

Exemplo: No, I don't often feel tired because I work from home and can take short breaks. For example, I stand up and stretch every hour, which helps me stay alert during long periods at the computer.

Sugestão: Provide a complete, grammatical answer and avoid trailing off. Use a topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words. Replace vague phrases like 'a lot of effort' with concrete descriptions (e.g., 'physical tasks, emotional support, and long hours').

Exemplo: I usually feel tired when I volunteer at the hospital on Thursdays and Fridays. This is because bedside nursing care involves long shifts, physically moving patients, and providing emotional support, which can be both physically and mentally draining.

Sugestão: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence, then list specific activities using linking words. Avoid repeating words ('or or') and use more natural collocations (e.g., 'have a meal' instead of 'eat a good food').

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually relax by having a massage or going to a spa, and sometimes I treat myself to a nice meal at a restaurant. These activities help me unwind and recover my energy.

× I really don't feel tired because my job is just in a work from home set up.

✓ I really don't feel tired because my job is just a work-from-home setup.

The phrase 'work from home set up' is incorrect word form and word order. 'Work-from-home' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before 'setup', and 'setup' is a noun. Use 'a' article: 'a work-from-home setup'.

× So I'm mostly sitting around in front of a computer for several hours hours,, but I never forget to stand up or do some exercise.

✓ So I'm mostly sitting in front of a computer for several hours, but I never forget to stand up or do some exercise.

There is a duplicated word 'hours' and extra punctuation ',,'. 'Sitting around' is acceptable but 'sitting in front of a computer' is clearer. Remove duplicate and extra comma. 'Do some exercise' is acceptable but could be 'exercise' without 'some'.

× I feel tired every time I do volunteer duty in the hospital every Thursday and Friday.

✓ I feel tired every time I do volunteer work at the hospital on Thursdays and Fridays.

Use 'volunteer work' rather than 'volunteer duty'. Use preposition 'at' for 'at the hospital'. For habitual actions, plural days 'on Thursdays and Fridays' is more natural. Maintains present simple tense.

× In the hospital I am doing a bedside nursing care to most of the patients and that requires a lot of effort, a lot of understanding and a lot of

✓ At the hospital I provide bedside nursing care to most of the patients, and that requires a lot of effort, a lot of understanding, and a lot of patience.

Use 'at the hospital' rather than 'in the hospital' for general activity. 'Provide bedside nursing care' is natural; 'doing a bedside nursing care' is incorrect article and verb choice. 'Care' is uncountable so no 'a'. Sentence was incomplete; added 'patience' to finish the list. Added commas and conjunction for correct list punctuation.

× After my volunteer shifts or my regular work shifts I usually go for a massage, go for a spa or or go to a restaurant and eat a good food and drink some good drinks.

✓ After my volunteer shifts or my regular work shifts I usually go for a massage, go to a spa, or go to a restaurant and eat good food and have some drinks.

Remove duplicated 'or'. Use 'go to a spa' rather than 'go for a spa'. 'Eat good food' uses uncountable 'food' without 'a'. Use 'have some drinks' instead of 'drink some good drinks' to avoid awkward repetition. Commas separate items in the list.