Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g. “oh familiar”). Also correct grammar: say “I often feel tired, especially when I’m working or approaching a deadline.”

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. For example, when I’m working long hours or facing tight deadlines, I get mentally drained and find it hard to concentrate.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific details and use linking words. Correct word choice (e.g. use “tight deadline”, not “tight of deadline”; “exhausted” instead of “exalted”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and explain effects briefly.

Exemplo: I feel tired when I work long hours to meet a tight deadline. As a result, I often feel exhausted and irritable, which negatively affects my mood and productivity.

Sugestão: Structure your response: start with a topic sentence stating what you do, then give 2–3 specific activities with linking words. Use correct verb forms and collocations (e.g. “listen to music”, “take a short walk”). Mention approximate time if relevant.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I try to relax and recharge. For example, I take deep breaths and listen to music for five to ten minutes, and if possible I go for a short walk outside to clear my mind.

× Yes, I often feel tired. I feel tired when I'm working or I feel stressful because the deadline is really oh familiar

✓ Yes, I often feel tired. I feel tired when I'm working or I feel stressed because the deadline is very close and familiar.

Incorrect use of 'stressful' to describe the speaker's feeling; 'stressful' describes something that causes stress. Also 'oh familiar' is unclear; likely intended 'very close' or 'familiar'. Use 'stressed' (adjective describing feeling) and clearer phrasing 'very close' or 'familiar'. Maintain present tense.

× I feel tired when I'm working for a long hour on tight of deadline.

✓ I feel tired when I'm working for long hours on a tight deadline.

Errors: 'a long hour' should be 'long hours' (plural duration), and 'on tight of deadline' is incorrect preposition and word order. Use 'on a tight deadline' or 'under a tight deadline'. This keeps present continuous and general habit.

× Especially when I have to meet a tight of deadline, I feel really exalted and sometimes really stressful.

✓ Especially when I have to meet a tight deadline, I feel really exhausted and sometimes very stressed.

'a tight of deadline' is wrong; correct is 'a tight deadline'. 'Exalted' means extremely happy or elevated, not tired; the intended word is 'exhausted'. Also 'stressful' describes something that causes stress; use 'stressed' to describe a person. Use adverb 'very' not 'really' for clarity or keep 'really' if preferred.

× It affects a lot on my mood.

✓ It affects my mood a lot.

Wrong preposition 'on' after 'affects a lot'. The verb 'affect' takes a direct object: 'affects my mood'. Place adverb 'a lot' after object or 'greatly affects my mood'.

× When I feel tired, I often keep myself calm.

✓ When I feel tired, I often try to keep myself calm.

Missing verb 'try to' makes sentence more natural and indicates effort. 'Keep myself calm' is acceptable but adding 'try to' fits the habitual present context.

× I try to take a deep breath doing some favorite tabs such as listen music, let myself relax around five to ten minutes.

✓ I try to take a deep breath and do some favorite things such as listening to music, letting myself relax for around five to ten minutes.

Multiple issues: need conjunction 'and' between actions; 'doing' should be 'do' or rephrase; 'listen music' requires gerund 'listening to music'; 'let myself relax around five to ten minutes' needs gerund 'letting' and preposition 'for' before duration. Use parallel gerunds for consistency.

× Sometimes I also like to go out to go around

✓ Sometimes I also like to go out for a walk or just walk around.

Phrase 'go out to go around' is redundant and unidiomatic. Use 'go out for a walk' or 'walk around' to express the intended meaning. Keep present tense for habits.