Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; give one clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear words (“grass tend to relax”) and use linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) to connect reasons and results.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired at the end of the day because I usually work long hours. For example, during busy periods I work overtime, so my energy levels drop and I spend the evening relaxing at home to recover.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details and correct verb forms. Use linking words like “because” and “and” to make the sequence clear. Replace vague or incorrect phrases (e.g., “repair reports”, “make me schedule more busy”) with precise verbs and expressions.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired at the end of the month because I have to work overtime to complete timesheets. In addition, I need to finish and submit monthly reports to my manager, so my schedule becomes very busy and stressful.

Sugestão: Answer with a clear structure: state the main idea, then give contrasting actions with linking words (e.g., “if…then” or “however”). Correct vocabulary (e.g., “take a short rest” is good; replace “breathe now” with “do breathing exercises” and “full night sleep” with “a full night’s sleep”). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: If I am only a little tired, I usually take a short rest or do some breathing exercises to recharge. However, if I'm very tired, I prefer to go to bed early and get a full night's sleep so I can recover properly.

× Yes, I often feel tired especially at the end of the day.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired, especially at the end of the day.

Missing comma after an introductory clause 'Yes' and before the adverbial phrase 'especially at the end of the day' to improve clarity; not a grammatical category in the provided list so left blank.

× During busy periods I have to work over time.

✓ During busy periods I have to work overtime.

Incorrect word form: 'over time' should be the single-word adverb 'overtime' when meaning extra working hours. This is a word-formation/usage issue that affects subject-verb meaning; use 'overtime' as one word.

× So my energy levels drop and I usually spend the evening grass tend to relax.

✓ So my energy levels drop and I usually spend the evening relaxing.

Sentence structure error and incorrect words: 'grass tend to relax' is nonsensical and likely a mistranscription. Replace with the gerund 'relaxing' to correctly follow 'spend the evening'. The verb pattern is 'spend time doing something' so use the -ing form.

× I usually feel tired at the end of the month because I have to work overtime to finish the time sheets.

✓ I usually feel tired at the end of the month because I have to work overtime to finish the timesheets.

Word choice/compound noun: 'time sheets' is commonly written as 'timesheets' or 'time sheets' depending on style; use 'timesheets' as a single word in this context. Tense is appropriate (present habitual). Marked as present tense issue to align with list but main issue is word form.

× I also need to repair reports and submit them to my manager which make me schedule more busy.

✓ I also need to prepare reports and submit them to my manager, which makes my schedule busier.

Multiple errors: 'repair reports' is incorrect word choice—use 'prepare reports'. Relative clause agreement and verb form: 'which make' should be 'which makes' to agree with the singular noun 'which' referring to the preceding clause or 'this' action; use 'makes'. Adjective/adverb choice: 'schedule more busy' is ungrammatical—use 'my schedule busier'. This is a sentence structure and subject-verb agreement issue.

× If I'm only a little tired, I usually take a short rest or breathe now to recharge, but if I'm very tired, I prefer to go to bed early and get the full night sleep so I can recover properly.

✓ If I'm only a little tired, I usually take a short rest or breathe deeply to recharge, but if I'm very tired, I prefer to go to bed early and get a full night's sleep so I can recover properly.

Multiple corrections: 'breathe now' is incorrect — use 'breathe deeply' (verb + -ing not required here but adverb improves meaning). 'the full night sleep' should be 'a full night's sleep' (possessive noun form and article). Also 'breathe deeply' uses adverb to modify verb. Marked under verb + -ing/form issue because original 'breathe now' suggests wrong form; main fixes are word choice and article/possessive usage.