Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (assignments, environment is unfamiliar), and avoid redundancy. Add one specific reason and link with a connector. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially this semester because I have many assignments to complete. Also, the new environment has been stressful, which makes it harder to rest.

Sugestão: Give a direct time frame and clear reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases (come to presume me) with specific stressors. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired in the evenings after I get home from school because I still have to finish assignments. In addition, crowded or noisy places and social pressures make me more drained.

Sugestão: Structure the answer: state your main coping strategy, then give specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and use more formal vocabulary (TikTok, anime, journaling). Keep under five sentences.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take a short break first and then resume my work. After finishing, I relax by watching short videos on TikTok, watching anime, or writing in my journal to clear my mind.

× Yes, I often feel tired, especially this semester because I have a lot of assignment to do and the environments is not very unfamiliar here.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired, especially this semester because I have a lot of assignments to do and the environment is not very familiar here.

'Assignment' should be plural 'assignments' because 'a lot of' requires a plural count noun. 'Environments' should be singular 'environment' when referring to the overall surroundings. 'Not very unfamiliar' is a double negative and awkward; it should be 'not very familiar' or 'quite unfamiliar'. Here 'not very familiar' fits the meaning. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns after quantifiers and avoid double negatives. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I will feel tired whenever I do the assignment after going back from the schools and because there are a lot of people who come to presume me.

✓ I feel tired whenever I do the assignments after returning from school and because there are a lot of people who come to judge me.

'I will feel' is unnecessary future; the habitual situation requires present simple 'I feel'. 'Do the assignment' should be 'do the assignments' (plural). 'Going back from the schools' is awkward — use 'returning from school' for idiomatic English. 'Come to presume me' is incorrect collocation; likely intended 'come to judge me'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and choose correct verbs and singular/plural nouns. Grammar problem type ID:7

× Usually when I feel tired, I'm going to stop for a while, then doing the assignment and after that I will do the things that I like, such as scrolling through Tiktoks, watching animes and doing a journal.

✓ Usually when I feel tired, I stop for a while, then do the assignments, and after that I do things I like, such as scrolling through TikToks, watching anime, and writing in a journal.

'I'm going to stop' suggests future intention; for habitual actions use simple present 'I stop'. 'Then doing the assignment' is a fragment; use base verb 'then do the assignments'. 'Watching animes' should be 'watching anime' because 'anime' is uncountable in English. 'Doing a journal' is awkward; use 'writing in a journal'. Also capitalize 'TikToks' as 'TikToks' is acceptable but 'TikTok videos' is clearer. Suggestion: use base verb form after sequencing adverbs and use correct -ing/uninflected noun forms. Grammar problem type ID:8