Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "most of the time" repeated). Use correct pronouns and verb forms (e.g., "my family is in Egypt" not "was").

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired since becoming a mother because I now have many responsibilities. Additionally, I recently moved to New Jersey while my family is still in Egypt, so I lack nearby support and often feel overwhelmed.

Sugestão: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence about when you feel tired, then provide specific examples in correct tense and order. Correct vocabulary ("lie down to sleep" not "lick at sleep"), verb forms ("wakes me up", "I have to wake up"), and finish the sentence. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to connect causes and effects.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired in the middle of the day because my daughter wakes me several times at night. As a result, I have to wake up early and still do many tasks in the morning, such as preparing meals and doing laundry, so I become exhausted by afternoon.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct topic sentence describing your main strategy, then list two or three specific restorative activities with brief reasons. Improve phrasing ("take some quality time for myself", "recharge my batteries") and connect ideas with linking words like "for example" and "so".

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I take some quality time for myself to recharge. For example, I follow a short skin-care routine, go for a walk around my neighborhood, or go shopping by car; I usually ask my husband to look after our daughter so I can relax.

× Yes, actually after I became a mom and I have a lot of responsibilities, so most of the time I feel tired.

✓ Yes, actually after I became a mom and I had a lot of responsibilities, so most of the time I felt tired.

The original mixes tenses and lacks consistent article problems: 'a mom' is correct but the sentence shifts incorrectly between present and past. This is primarily a tense and article/context consistency issue. Use past tense 'had' and 'felt' to match 'became' (past). Ensure articles remain correct ('a mom' is fine). Suggestion: Keep tense consistent within the clause by using past tense when referring to the time after becoming a mother.

× Moreover, I relocated to New Jersey and most of them my family was in Egypt, so I don't have any support.

✓ Moreover, I relocated to New Jersey and most of my family was in Egypt, so I didn't have any support.

The phrase 'most of them my family' is an incorrect structure; it should be 'most of my family'. Also tense should match 'relocated' (past) so use 'was' and 'didn't have'. Suggestion: Use 'most of my family' and keep past tense after 'relocated'.

× So most of them I feel overwhelmed.

✓ So most of the time I feel overwhelmed.

'Most of them' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'most of the time' to indicate frequency. Replace 'them' with 'the time'. Suggestion: Use common time expressions like 'most of the time' for habitual feelings.

× Well, I often get tired when I lick at sleep, especially when my daughter wake me up at several times at night.

✓ Well, I often get tired when I lack sleep, especially when my daughter wakes me up several times at night.

'Lick at sleep' is incorrect — the correct verb is 'lack' (meaning to have insufficient). 'Wake' needs third-person singular agreement 'wakes'. Also 'at several times' is incorrect; use 'several times' without 'at'. Suggestion: Use 'lack sleep' and ensure subject-verb agreement with third-person singular ('wakes').

× Then I have to woke up in the morning doing, uh, a lot of tasks such as preparing meal taking, deciding over or doing laundry.

✓ Then I have to wake up in the morning and do a lot of tasks such as preparing meals, feeding, tidying up, or doing laundry.

The verb 'woke' is past tense but the modal 'have to' requires the base form 'wake'. The original also has run-on and word choice errors: 'preparing meal taking, deciding over' is ungrammatical. I replaced with parallel gerunds and correct nouns: 'preparing meals', 'feeding', 'tidying up'. Suggestion: After modal 'have to' use base verb 'wake'; list tasks in parallel form and use correct nouns/plural as needed.

× So I feel in the middle of the day I.

✓ So I feel exhausted in the middle of the day.

The original is an incomplete and disordered sentence ('I feel in the middle of the day I' lacks a complement and repeats subject). Provide a complete clause with appropriate adjective 'exhausted' or 'tired'. Suggestion: Ensure sentences have a clear subject and predicate and avoid repeating the subject unnecessarily.

× To be honest, I take myself quality time to charge my battery.

✓ To be honest, I take some quality time for myself to recharge my batteries.

'Take myself quality time' is ungrammatical. Use 'take some quality time for myself'. Also idiom is 'recharge my batteries' rather than 'charge my battery'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'take some time for myself' and 'recharge my batteries'.

× For example, skin care routine, walking around my neighborhood or taking my car to go shopping.

✓ For example, doing a skin-care routine, walking around my neighborhood, or taking the car to go shopping.

List items need parallel structure. 'Skin care routine' should be 'doing a skin-care routine' (verb form) to match 'walking' and 'taking'. Also 'taking my car to go shopping' is better as 'taking the car to go shopping' or 'driving to go shopping'. Suggestion: Keep items in a list parallel and use consistent verb forms.

× Uh, and leave my daughter with my husband.

✓ And leaving my daughter with my husband.

In context this should be part of the list of activities and use gerund 'leaving' to match the other -ing forms. 'Uh, and leave' is a spoken filler; for corrected written form, 'leaving' fits the parallel structure. Suggestion: Keep parallel verb forms in lists and use gerunds when listing ongoing actions.