Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more precise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid unclear phrases like “grown out,” and keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences). Add one brief reason with a linking word (e.g., because) and a specific example.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially in the evenings. Because I have been working long hours recently, I usually come home exhausted and have little energy to pursue my hobbies.

Sugestão: Give a direct and complete answer with a clear time or situation, use linking words to connect ideas, and finish the sentence. Be specific about the situations that cause tiredness (e.g., long shifts, stressful tasks, uncertainty about career).

Exemplo: I usually feel tired when I think about my future, especially when I worry about my job. For example, after a stressful shift or when I face a difficult task at work, I feel mentally drained and anxious about my career prospects.

Sugestão: Answer clearly with one main coping strategy, use correct tense and grammar, and avoid unnecessary negative comments. Provide a brief explanation of how it helps and give a specific example. Use linking words like so or because.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually write in a journal to clear my mind. For instance, I write about my feelings and plans because putting thoughts on paper helps me relax and sleep better.

× Yeah, I often feel tired like right now.

✓ Yeah, I often feel tired, like right now.

Minor punctuation needed to separate clauses for clarity. Use a comma before 'like' when it introduces an example or clarification.

× I feel like I'm grown out because I'm not thinking about my dreams.

✓ I feel like I've grown apart because I'm not thinking about my dreams.

'Grown out' is not correct in this context. The intended meaning is separation or change over time, which is better expressed with 'grown apart'. 'I've grown apart' requires present perfect to show change up to now.

× Um when I start thinking about my future case right now I feel like I'm struggling with my job so every time I feel tired, every time I have a problem in my job, I feel

✓ Um, when I start thinking about my future right now, I feel like I'm struggling with my job, so every time I feel tired or have a problem at work, I feel upset.

Run-on and fragmented sentence. Remove odd word 'case'. Add commas to separate clauses. Use 'at work' instead of 'in my job'. Combine repeated phrases and finish the sentence with a clear verb ('feel upset') to avoid a sentence fragment.

× Yeah when I feel tired I'm writing in my book I feel you know I wrote my feelings and just talk to myself because I don't have friends so I just writing and book.

✓ Yeah, when I feel tired I write in my journal; I write down my feelings and talk to myself because I don't have friends, so I just write in a book.

Tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms: use simple present 'I write' for habitual actions rather than 'I'm writing'. 'I wrote' is past — inconsistent with habitual context. Use 'write down' and 'talk to myself'. Correct 'just writing and book' to 'just write in a book' or 'write in a journal'. Add punctuation to separate ideas.