Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repeating ideas (e.g., packed schedule and later mention of packed schedule). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'exhausted', 'drained') accurately and check grammar (use singular/plural and articles correctly).

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired because I juggle full-time work and evening classes. Furthermore, I frequently stay up late watching TV or scrolling my phone, which leaves me exhausted the next day.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer, then give one specific example and avoid repetition. Improve grammar (correct verb agreement: 'feels' -> 'feel') and use a linking phrase to connect clauses. Replace vague phrases like 'a long time' with more precise expressions ('long day', 'after long shifts').

Exemplo: I usually feel tired after a long day at work or university. For example, after back-to-back meetings and classes my concentration drops, so I feel mentally drained and sleepy.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain how and why the strategy works. Fix minor grammar issues (use articles: 'a special playlist', subject-verb agreement: 'which helps... and gives me a burst'). Use a linking word to show sequence.

Exemplo: I usually listen to upbeat music when I feel worn out. I put on a special playlist because energetic songs lift my mood and give me a short burst of energy, so I can return to my tasks more focused.

× Yes, I do often feel tired, mainly because my schedule is quite packed with both work and study.

✓ Yes, I often do feel tired, mainly because my schedule is quite packed with both work and study.

The adverb 'often' is better placed before the auxiliary 'do' for natural English word order. Placing 'do' before 'often' is not ungrammatical but sounds less natural; moving 'often' before 'do' improves fluency. Suggestion: Put frequency adverbs (often, always, usually) before the main auxiliary or main verb: 'I often do feel' or more simply 'I often feel.'

× I tend to stay up late watching TV or scrolling my phone, which makes me feel exhausted the next day.

✓ I tend to stay up late watching TV or scrolling through my phone, which makes me feel exhausted the next day.

The phrase 'scrolling my phone' is nonstandard; the correct collocation is 'scrolling through my phone.' Use the present participle 'scrolling' with the correct preposition 'through.' Suggestion: Use common collocations: 'scroll through my phone'.

× I tend to feel tired after a long time at school or work, mainly because my schedule is quite packed.

✓ I tend to feel tired after spending a long time at school or work, mainly because my schedule is quite packed.

The original 'after a long time at school or work' is understandable but awkward. Adding 'spending' clarifies the action and makes the sentence grammatically smoother. Suggestion: Use verb forms to clarify duration: 'after spending a long time.'

× if I have lots of meetings or classes, it makes my brain feels overloaded and I can easily feel tired.

✓ if I have lots of meetings or classes, it makes my brain feel overloaded and I can easily feel tired.

After 'it makes,' the verb should be in base form 'feel,' not 'feels.' 'Makes' is a causative verb requiring the following verb to be in the base form. Using 'feels' causes a subject-verb disagreement in the subordinate clause. Suggestion: Use base form after causative verbs: 'makes my brain feel.'

× When I feel worn out, listening to music is one of my favorite ways.

✓ When I feel worn out, listening to music is one of my favorite ways to relax.

The original sentence is grammatical but a bit incomplete: 'one of my favorite ways' typically is followed by an infinitive or additional information. Adding 'to relax' completes the idea and clarifies purpose. Suggestion: Complete expressions like 'one of my favorite ways to + verb.'

× I play upbeat songs from special playlist which helps lift my mood and give me burst of energy.

✓ I play upbeat songs from a special playlist, which helps lift my mood and gives me a burst of energy.

Several errors: 'special playlist' needs an article 'a.' The relative clause refers to 'playlist' (singular), so the verb should be 'helps' (singular) and the subject 'which' refers to the playlist; however context intends that playing songs helps, so 'which helps' is okay. Also 'give me burst' needs 'gives me a burst' with singular verb 'gives' agreeing with the singular subject and article 'a' before 'burst.' Suggestion: Use articles before singular nouns and ensure verb agreement: 'a special playlist... which helps... and gives me a burst of energy.'

× Then I am able to get back to what I was doing.

✓ Then I am able to get back to what I was doing.

This sentence is correct as written; no grammatical correction needed. It fits the past-continuous context 'what I was doing.' Suggestion: No change necessary; maintain tense consistency.