Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and gives reasons, but it's slightly long and partially repetitive. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating the same idea twice (walking long hours and being drained), and use a linking phrase to connect the second cause (staying up late). Try to keep it within 3–5 sentences and include one specific detail to make it more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. For example, when I have to walk for around 12 hours during busy days, it drains my energy quickly. In addition, I sometimes stay up late watching TV or scrolling on my phone, which makes me feel sleepy the next day.

Sugestão: This answer is clear and gives causes and consequences, but use past/simple present consistency (avoid 'I am feeling tired' as a general statement). Add a linking word to connect cause and effect and include a specific time or example to strengthen the response.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired when I don't get enough sleep because I stay up late watching TV or scrolling on my phone. Consequently, I find it hard to concentrate at work or school the next day and feel sleepy throughout the day.

Sugestão: Good structure and practical strategy. Improve by removing the stray '1 I feel tired.' Start with a topic sentence, use a linking phrase to explain the benefit of napping, and give a specific detail (when or where you nap). Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap of about 20 minutes to recharge my energy. This brief rest helps me feel refreshed, and I always set an alarm so I don't oversleep and disrupt my night-time routine.

× 'Yes, I often feel exhausted when I walk 12 hours a day.'

✓ 'Yes, I often feel exhausted when I walk for 12 hours a day.'

'walk 12 hours a day' is missing the preposition for to indicate duration. Use 'walk for 12 hours a day' to show how long the action lasts.'

× 'Moreover, I usually stay up late using my phone or watching TV, so I feel sleepy on the next day.'

✓ 'Moreover, I usually stay up late using my phone or watching TV, so I feel sleepy the next day.'

'on the next day' is unnatural in this context. Use 'the next day' to refer to the following day in general. Also keep present simple 'feel' for habitual result.'

× 'I am feeling tired when I don't get enough sleep because I usually stay up late watching TV or scrolling on my phone.'

✓ 'I feel tired when I don't get enough sleep because I usually stay up late watching TV or scrolling on my phone.'

'I am feeling tired' is present continuous and suggests a temporary state; for a habitual cause-result use simple present 'I feel tired when...' to match 'when I don't get enough sleep.'

× 'As a result, it's hard to concentrate on the next day and I feel sleepy the whole day.'

✓ 'As a result, it's hard to concentrate the next day and I feel sleepy all day.'

'on the next day' should be 'the next day' and 'the whole day' is correct but 'all day' is more natural. Maintain simple present for habitual effects.'

× '1 I feel tired.'

✓ 'When I feel tired, I like to take a quick nap.'

'1 I feel tired.' appears to be a typo or misplaced numeral and an incomplete answer. Rephrase to connect to the question 'What do you do when you feel tired?' by starting with 'When I feel tired,' and remove the stray '1.'

× 'I like to take a quick nap, even a 20 minute rest, recharge my batteries and help me feel refreshed.'

✓ 'I like to take a quick nap, even a 20-minute rest, to recharge my batteries and help me feel refreshed.'

Missing 'to' before 'recharge' makes the sentence two verbs attached incorrectly. Use the infinitive 'to recharge' to show purpose. Also add a hyphen in '20-minute' as a compound adjective.'

× 'But I also set an alarm to make sure that I don't oversleep.'

✓ 'But I also set an alarm to make sure I don't oversleep.'

Remove the optional 'that' after 'make sure' for more natural speech. This is not strictly an error but improving register.'