Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief specific reason or context. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. For example, say when and why you feel tired and use correct tense and word order.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after returning to school. For instance, after a long weekend I usually feel drained because I stay up late and have to wake up early for classes.

Sugestão: Provide a direct, complete answer with specific situations and correct vocabulary. Use linking words if you add details. Avoid unclear phrases like “chest term” — likely intended as “short of breath” or “around exam time”. Clarify and expand with one or two supporting details.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired in the late afternoon or during exam periods. For example, after long study sessions I become exhausted and find it hard to concentrate.

Sugestão: Answer clearly with 1–2 coping strategies and brief reasons. Use natural phrases (e.g., “I take a nap” or “I go out with friends to refresh myself”) and avoid awkward word choices like “retail trade detail trade.” Keep it concise and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap to recharge. Alternatively, I sometimes go out with friends for a coffee or some shopping to clear my mind and feel more energetic.

× Yes I often feel tired when I got came back to the school or like after a weekend

✓ Yes, I often feel tired when I get back to school or after a weekend.

The original mixes past tense forms 'got came' incorrectly. The question asks about habitual behavior so present simple 'get' is required. Remove extra article 'the' before 'school' and simplify 'or like after a weekend' to 'or after a weekend' for clarity. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and avoid redundant words.

× I often feel tired like a chest term or

✓ I often feel tired, especially at the end of a term.

The phrase 'like a chest term or' is unclear and structurally incorrect. The student likely meant 'at the end of a term' or 'during exam term'. Use 'especially' to show when the tiredness occurs. Ensure the phrase is complete and meaningful.

× When I feel tired basically I sleep or opposite when I hang out with my friends and do like shopping retail trade detail trade and I'm I'm gonna change my fresh mind.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually sleep. Alternatively, I hang out with my friends and go shopping to refresh my mind.

This sentence is long, repetitive and contains informal fillers ('basically', 'like', 'retail trade detail trade', repeated 'I'm'). Split into two clear sentences and use appropriate verbs: 'usually sleep' for typical action and 'go shopping to refresh my mind' for the alternative. Replace 'gonna' with 'go to' or 'to' and 'change my fresh mind' with 'refresh my mind'. Keep formality consistent and avoid filler words.