Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words, and correct basic grammar (e.g., “I have to study a lot,” “I exercise,” “I feel very tired after exercising”). Aim for 3–4 sentences and use connectors like 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired because I’m a full-time student and I have to study for many hours every day. In addition, I exercise regularly, and intense workouts make me very exhausted afterwards. For these reasons, I usually feel tired by the evening.

Sugestão: Give a direct time reference and one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases and incomplete thoughts. Use clearer vocabulary to describe the type of tiredness (e.g., 'physically' or 'mentally/emotionally') and one example of a situation when you feel tired.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired in the evenings after a long day of classes and studying because concentrating for hours drains me mentally. For example, after an afternoon of lectures and an evening of homework, I often feel both physically sleepy and mentally exhausted.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, structured answer with two or three specific actions and link them logically. Use correct tense and pronouns, and avoid fragmented sentences. Explain briefly why each action helps (e.g., rest restores energy, social time improves mood). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap to recharge and feel more alert. Sometimes I also meet my boyfriend because spending time with him lifts my mood and gives me more energy.

× Currently I'm a student, so I have to do a lot of work studies.

✓ Currently I'm a student, so I have to do a lot of study and a lot of work.

The original sentence mixes countable/uncountable forms and has incorrect word order ('work studies'). This is a sentence structure error (type 26). Use 'study' (uncountable) or 'studies' for specific courses; here 'a lot of study' or 'a lot of studying' and separate 'work' if both are meant. Suggestion: choose 'a lot of studying' or 'a lot of study and work.'

× So I feel, I often feel tired and oh, even though I'm, I'm a student, but I even though I'm a student, I have to exercise it.

✓ I often feel tired, and even though I'm a student, I still have to exercise.

This sentence has repetition and incorrect phrasing ('exercise it') and poor structure (type 26). Remove duplicated fragments, avoid 'but' with 'even though' together, and use 'still' to show contrast. 'Exercise it' is incorrect — use 'exercise' intransitively or 'exercise regularly.'

× And after exercise I feel really so tired.

✓ After exercising I feel really tired.

The phrase 'really so tired' is redundant and awkward; 'after exercise' is better as 'after exercising.' This is an incorrect conjunction/word choice / sentence quality issue (closest match type 16). Use one intensifier: 'really tired' or 'so tired.'

× Umm, to be honest, I feel tired every day because currently I'm a student and I have a lot of work to do, a lot of studies to do and when I focus on heavy, when I focus on study and I got, I feel really tired like emotionally and.

✓ To be honest, I feel tired every day because I'm currently a student and have a lot of work and studying to do; when I concentrate on heavy studying I feel emotionally exhausted.

This sentence contains awkward tense and incomplete fragments (type 6). 'I got' is incorrect here. Use present simple 'I feel' for habitual actions and rephrase fragments into a complete clause. Replace 'focus on heavy' with 'concentrate on heavy studying' and finish the idea 'emotionally exhausted.'

× Well, when I feel tired, I often go to my bed and take a sleep or I met my boyfriend dating with him and him is my ener.

✓ When I feel tired, I often go to bed and take a nap, or I meet my boyfriend and date him; he gives me energy.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb forms ('go to my bed', 'take a sleep', 'I met'), wrong pronoun use ('him is my ener'), and sentence structure problems (type 26 and 12). Use 'go to bed', 'take a nap' (or 'sleep'), use present simple for habitual actions ('I meet', 'he gives'), and use 'gives me energy' instead of 'is my ener.'

× He ener my energy is from him.

✓ My energy comes from him.

This is incorrect pronoun and word order (type 12). 'He ener' is ungrammatical. Use passive/active clear structure: 'My energy comes from him' or 'He gives me energy.' Keep concise subject-verb-object order.

× So yeah, that's that's all all of my when I doing.

✓ So yeah, that's all for what I do when I'm tired.

The original has repetition and is missing verbs/articles, making it ungrammatical (type 26). Remove duplicates, supply the missing verb 'am' and rephrase to a complete clause. 'All of my when I doing' is meaningless; change to 'what I do when I'm tired.'