Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g. "very bad at myself") and unnecessary repetitions. Use linking words for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. I usually become exhausted because I balance studying with outdoor activities, so I don't get enough sleep. As a result, I sometimes struggle to keep up with my classmates.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer then give two clear, specific examples and link them with conjunctions. Correct grammar (singular/plural agreement) and clarify unclear phrases (e.g. "preparing for the aisles" unclear).

Exemplo: I usually feel tired after physical activities and long periods of study. For example, playing cricket or football leaves me breathless, and after several hours of exam preparation I also feel mentally drained.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer, then briefly explain why it helps using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea and fix collocations (say "go to bed" not "go to the bed").

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually go to bed and rest for a short time. This helps me recover physically and mentally, and afterwards I can concentrate better on my work.

× Definitely I do.

✓ I definitely do.

Adverb placement: 'definitely' should come after the subject and before the main verb in this sentence. Placing it before the subject is unnatural in standard English. Suggestion: use subject + adverb + verb order (I definitely do).

× I really feel very bad at myself because in my age where everyone is competing, I'm getting very tired easily.

✓ I really feel very bad about myself because at my age, when everyone is competing, I get tired very easily.

Incorrect use of pronouns/prepositions and tense: use 'about myself' not 'at myself'. 'In my age' should be 'at my age' and the clause order is improved by 'when everyone is competing'. Use present simple 'I get' for habitual state instead of present progressive 'I'm getting'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'about' and simple present for habitual actions.

× One of the main reason is I mostly get exhausted when I am playing on an outdoor activity such as cricket, football or on the other hand, I easily get tired while reading some newspaper or preparing for the aisles and especially practicing.

✓ One of the main reasons is that I mostly get exhausted when I play outdoor sports such as cricket or football; I also get tired easily while reading a newspaper or preparing for exams, especially when practicing.

Singular/plural and word choice: 'One of the main reason' should be 'One of the main reasons' (plural). 'Playing on an outdoor activity' is incorrect — use 'play outdoor sports'. 'Some newspaper' should be 'a newspaper'. 'Preparing for the aisles' is likely a mishearing; use 'preparing for exams'. Use simple present 'play' for habitual actions. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement and use appropriate collocations ('play sports', 'a newspaper', 'preparing for exams').

× To be honest, whenever I get tired, I usually go to the bed and take some rest.

✓ To be honest, whenever I get tired, I usually go to bed and rest.

Article error and word choice: use 'go to bed' not 'go to the bed' in this context. 'Take some rest' is understandable but 'rest' is more natural. Suggestion: omit the article with fixed expressions like 'go to bed' and use the verb 'rest'.

× It is the best thing to control my physical and mental health because I often don't do any work when I am feeling exhausted because it causes my health and also I can't concentrate on the things which I am doing.

✓ It is the best thing for my physical and mental health because I often don't do any work when I feel exhausted; it affects my health and I can't concentrate on what I am doing.

Sentence structure and word choice: 'to control my physical and mental health' is awkward — use 'for my physical and mental health'. Remove the repeated 'because' and use a semicolon or separate sentences. 'It causes my health' is incorrect; use 'it affects my health'. Use 'what I am doing' instead of 'the things which I am doing'. Suggestion: simplify sentence structure, avoid repetition, and choose correct verbs like 'affect'.