Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “all parts” and correct collocations (e.g., “seems to rest”).

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. This is mainly because I tend to overthink many areas of my life, so my mind keeps working late into the night. As a result, I fall asleep exhausted and emotionally drained.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear time or situation and give a specific example. Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., “people who are close to me”, “conversation”). Use a linking word to connect reason and result.

Exemplo: I usually feel most tired after arguments with people who are close to me. For example, if I have a falling-out with a friend, I replay the conversation in my head and worry about the relationship, which prevents me from relaxing.

Sugestão: Structure the answer: state the two actions clearly, use appropriate vocabulary and reduce repetition. Replace awkward phrases (e.g., “old world”) with clearer expressions and link the actions with reasons.

Exemplo: I usually do two things. First, I listen to calming music because it helps me forget my worries and feel calmer. Second, I try to sleep so I can switch off my emotions and recharge.

× My brain never seems a rest because it's still working until I just fall asleep.

✓ My brain never seems at rest because it's still working until I finally fall asleep.

The phrase 'seems a rest' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'seems at rest'. 'Finally' is a better temporal connector than 'just' here to show the end of activity. Suggestion: use 'seems at rest' and 'finally' for clarity.

× Umm, it's happened when I argue with people who close to my heart.

✓ Umm, it happens when I argue with people who are close to my heart.

The tense and verb form are incorrect and a preposition is missing: use 'it happens' (present habitual) not 'it's happened'. Also include the verb 'are' before 'close to my heart'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and include 'are'.

× I often feel exhausted because my mind won't rest.

✓ I often feel exhausted because my mind doesn't rest.

'Won't rest' implies refusal or future tendency; for a habitual or general statement use present simple 'doesn't rest'. Suggestion: replace 'won't' with 'doesn't' for typical states.

× I keep replaying the conservation in my head and still worrying the relationship.

✓ I keep replaying the conversation in my head and still worrying about the relationship.

The noun 'conservation' is incorrect; the correct word is 'conversation'. Also the verb 'worry' requires the preposition 'about' before 'the relationship'. Suggestion: use 'conversation' and 'worry about'.

× When I feel tired I always do two things.

✓ When I feel tired, I always do two things.

Missing comma after the introductory clause 'When I feel tired' for correct sentence structure. Suggestion: add a comma after introductory adverbial clause.

× First I listen to music because it helps me forget about old world and my old problems and the second I try to sleep.

✓ First, I listen to music because it helps me forget about the outside world and my old problems, and second, I try to sleep.

Missing commas after transition words 'First' and 'second'. 'Old world' is unclear; 'the outside world' fits better. Also add comma before 'and second' to separate clauses. Suggestion: add commas and use 'the outside world'.

× Yes I sleep.

✓ Yes, I sleep.

Missing comma after 'Yes' when used as an interjection. Suggestion: add comma for correct punctuation.

× Let me switch off my all emotions and I can rest.

✓ I let myself switch off all my emotions so I can rest.

The original word order 'switch off my all emotions' is incorrect. Use reflexive structure 'let myself' and place 'all' before the noun: 'all my emotions'. Also use 'so' to show purpose. Suggestion: use 'let myself' and 'all my emotions'.