Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms, and give one concise supporting detail with a linking word. Limit to 2–4 sentences. Replace informal fillers ("you know") and incorrect phrases ("walk 24/7", "staying on the bed").

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired because I balance work and study. For example, after a long day of walking between shifts and attending classes, I usually rest on my bed to recharge.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence about timing, use specific examples and correct vocabulary, and avoid unclear phrases ("hit the bug"). Use linking words like "especially" or "for example" and keep it to 2–3 sentences. Be specific about situations that make you tired.

Exemplo: I feel most tired during busy study periods, especially at the end of the week. For example, when I have multiple assignments and long days of walking between work and classes, I usually feel exhausted.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give 1–2 specific, natural actions you take. Avoid incorrect or unclear phrases ("drum scrolling", "blow up the thing", "taking a word"). Use linking words if giving multiple actions, and prefer varied vocabulary (rest, nap, relax, scroll).

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually rest or take a short nap to recover. Sometimes I scroll through social media for a few minutes to relax, but I try to limit it so I can sleep properly.

× As a working student who have to walk 24/7, I think sometimes I feel really tied up.

✓ As a working student who has to walk a lot, I think sometimes I feel really tied up.

The relative clause 'who have' refers to the singular noun 'student', so the verb must be 'has' (subject-verb agreement). Also '24/7' and 'walk 24/7' are idiomatic issues; replaced with 'a lot' to maintain meaning. Suggestion: match the verb form to the noun it refers to and use clearer time expressions.

× I think sometimes I feel really tied up.

✓ I think sometimes I feel really tired.

The word 'tied up' means busy or occupied, but the context asks about feeling tired. 'Tired' is the correct adjective. Suggestion: choose adjectives that accurately reflect the intended meaning.

× So I usually, you know, spend most of my time staying on the bed if I have free time.

✓ So I usually, you know, spend most of my time lying in bed if I have free time.

English uses 'lie/lying in bed' rather than 'stay on the bed'. 'On the bed' is grammatically possible but unnatural for resting; 'in bed' is idiomatic. Also 'stay' is not the correct verb for resting; 'lie' or 'lie down' is better. Suggestion: use idiomatic prepositions and correct verbs for activities (lie in bed, lie down).

× Well, I'm saying it actually depends on my workload.

✓ Well, I would say it actually depends on my workload.

Saying 'I'm saying' is awkward here. The speaker intends a habitual or general comment; 'I would say' or 'I'd say' is the natural present-tense stance. Suggestion: use 'I would say' for opinions and general statements.

× I get really tired especially when I have to do several assignments or you know, walk or long period of time.

✓ I get really tired especially when I have to do several assignments or, you know, walk for long periods of time.

Missing preposition 'for' before 'long periods of time' is required. Also plural 'periods' is natural. Suggestion: include necessary prepositions and use pluralization correctly for repeated durations.

× For example, if I have to hit the bug, I should get tired.

✓ For example, if I have to do a lot of physical work, I would get tired.

'Hit the bug' is not an English idiom and is unclear. The modal 'should' is also odd here; 'would' or 'will' fits hypothetical situations. Replaced with clear phrasing. Suggestion: avoid literal translations and choose appropriate English expressions; match modals to hypothetical meaning.

× Well, usually when I feel tired, I like to drum scrolling on the social media.

✓ Well, usually when I feel tired, I like scrolling through social media.

'Drum scrolling' is incorrect collocation. Use 'like scrolling' (verb + -ing) and 'through social media' as the prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use correct collocations and the gerund form after 'like'.

× Or maybe I intend to, you know, blow up the thing by taking a word for a while.

✓ Or maybe I intend to, you know, clear my head by taking a walk for a while.

The original contains incorrect idioms: 'blow up the thing' and 'taking a word' are wrong. The intended meaning is likely 'clear my head' and 'take a walk'. Suggestion: use correct idiomatic expressions and prepositions; 'take a walk' is the standard phrase.

× As a working student who have to walk 24/7, I think sometimes I feel really tied up.

✓ As a working student who has to walk a lot, I think sometimes I feel really tired.

This repeats the subject-verb agreement error: 'have' should be 'has' because the relative pronoun 'who' refers to the singular 'student'. Also corrected 'tied up' to 'tired' for meaning. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects in relative clauses.