Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid fillers (well, umm). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Use correct verb forms and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: Not really. I only feel tired occasionally after work because I go swimming every day to unwind. Occasionally I also go to the gym, which helps me recover energy and stay fit.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect reasons. Avoid hesitations and check grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement and verb forms). Be specific about what makes you tired.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired after work, especially recently because we have had several large projects. As a result, I’ve had to coordinate with different teams and do extra meetings, which has been mentally and physically draining.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: start with a topic sentence listing main activities, then give specific frequencies and one reason why they help. Remove filler words and fix grammar (e.g., “I play with her” not “played with her”).

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I exercise to recharge. For example, I play tennis three to four times a week and have a personal coach once a week, and I also swim regularly and go to the gym because physical activity helps me relax and sleep better.

× I go to swim every day after work.

✓ I go swimming every day after work.

After the verb 'go' to indicate leisure activities, use the -ing form (gerund). 'Go to swim' is incorrect word order; use 'go swimming'.

× Umm, sometimes I I go to gym as well.

✓ Umm, sometimes I go to the gym as well.

Duplicate word 'I I' is a repetition error and 'go to gym' needs the definite article 'the' before 'gym'. Correct structure: 'I go to the gym.'

× I usually feel tired after work umm especially in the past few months, there were some uh, projects going around umm.

✓ I usually feel tired after work. Especially in the past few months, there have been some projects going around.

The sentence mixes habitual present ('I usually feel') with past reference. For events continuing into the present, use present perfect 'there have been'. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× So it has been pretty busy for me umm I have to talk with different teams and working with my colleagues to push the project.

✓ So it has been pretty busy for me. I have to talk with different teams and work with my colleagues to push the project.

Parallel verbs after 'have to' require base form 'work' not 'working'. Use consistent verb forms in coordination: 'talk' and 'work'.

× I play tennis, umm, I go to gym a lot.

✓ I play tennis, umm, I go to the gym a lot.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'gym' in general statements: 'go to the gym'.

× I also swim umm, I play tennis like 3 to 4 times a week umm, and I also have a personal coach which I played with her around uh, once a week.

✓ I also swim. I play tennis about three to four times a week, and I also have a personal coach whom I play with about once a week.

Use numerals spelled out in formal speech 'three to four'. 'Which' is incorrect for people; use 'whom' or 'who'. Also use present tense 'play' to match habitual action and remove redundant pronoun 'her'.

× So for the rest of the time I'll just play with my friends umm, sometimes with.

✓ So for the rest of the time I'll just play with my friends, sometimes on my own.

The original ends abruptly 'sometimes with.' Complete the idea: either 'sometimes with them' or 'sometimes on my own'. 'I'll' is fine for future; provide clear complement to 'sometimes'.