Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clearer. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences; use correct grammar and natural phrasing (e.g., 'I often feel tired because I usually stay up late').

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. I usually stay up late because of a heavy high-school schedule and a habit of scrolling my phone at night. As a result, I rarely get enough sleep, which makes me feel exhausted during the day.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and check factual accuracy (one class lasting 43 hours seems incorrect). Use linking words to sequence details and be specific about timing. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired during the day, especially when I have back-to-back classes. For example, in the afternoon I often become exhausted by the second hour of a lesson because lessons are long and there is little time to rest between them.

Sugestão: Answer directly then add a brief contrast using linking words (e.g., 'However' or 'but'). Use consistent tense and natural vocabulary (avoid brand names unnecessarily). Mention precise actions and their effects to show coherence.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually have a caffeinated drink from the school café, such as coffee, to help me stay awake. However, often I do nothing and rely on getting more sleep at night, which is not always effective.

× Yes, I do, because I have the habit of staying up late for quite a few years now and because of the extreme schedule of Chinese high school and I studied there and I had really short sleep in time and after that I graduated and scrolled my phone until late so.

✓ Yes, I do, because I have had the habit of staying up late for quite a few years now; during my time in the Chinese high school I had a very tight schedule and got very little sleep, and after I graduated I often scrolled on my phone until late.

The original mixes present simple with past events incorrectly. Use present perfect 'have had' to show a habit that started in the past and continues to the present. Use past simple 'had' and 'graduated' for completed past periods. Also improve clause connection and word choice (e.g., 'got very little sleep', 'scrolled on my phone'). Suggestion: separate continuing habits (present perfect) from finished past situations (simple past) and use clear connectors.

× Normally during the day, especially when I have school and different classes.

✓ I normally feel tired during the day, especially when I have school and several classes.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking the main verb for the feeling. Add 'I feel tired' to complete the sentence and use 'several' or 'different' consistently as a quantifier. Suggestion: always include the subject and verb to form a full sentence.

× In our school one class lasts 43 hours, so I usually feel really tired in the period of the second session, like the second one and a half hour.

✓ In our school one class lasts 43 minutes, so I usually feel really tired during the second session, around the second half hour.

'43 hours' is likely incorrect; class length should be '43 minutes' (quantifier/time unit error). Also 'one and a half hour' should be 'one and a half hours' or 'half hour' depending on meaning. Use 'during' for periods and 'around the second half hour' to indicate timing. Suggestion: check units and use plural with 'hours' when greater than one.

× Well, I usually get something for example like coffee or Red Bull energy drink in the vending machine or just get some caffeine drink in our school cafe.

✓ Well, I usually get something, for example coffee or a Red Bull energy drink from the vending machine, or I get a caffeinated drink from our school cafe.

The original mixes informal fragments and lacks articles. Use present simple 'usually get' consistently and include 'a' before singular countable nouns ('a Red Bull', 'a caffeinated drink'). Also prefer clearer prepositions: 'from the vending machine'. Suggestion: include articles with singular countable nouns and keep verb tense consistent.

× But most of the time I just did nothing and then hope that I could fall asleep easier on that day in the night.

✓ But most of the time I do nothing and then hope that I can fall asleep more easily that night.

Tense inconsistency: 'did' is past but the rest of the sentence expresses habitual present (use 'do'). Use 'hope that I can' for present/future possibility. 'Easier' should be 'more easily' (adverb). 'On that day in the night' is awkward; use 'that night'. Suggestion: keep habitual statements in present simple, use adverbs for describing verbs, and simplify time expressions.