Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Use correct tense and word order.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired when I get home from work. Because I work long hours on my feet, I usually feel exhausted by evening; for example, after a full day at the shop I only want to rest and have a quiet dinner.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer with correct tense and clearer reasons. Use linking words (for instance, sometimes, because) and provide one specific example to clarify the cause of tiredness.

Exemplo: I usually feel tired when I come back from work because I stand and concentrate all day. Sometimes I also feel tired after returning from a holiday, especially if the trip involved a lot of traveling by bus or plane.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use correct grammar. State the action, then briefly explain the effect with a linking word. Avoid filler words and repetition; use precise vocabulary.

Exemplo: I usually make myself a cup of coffee when I feel tired because caffeine boosts my energy and sharpens my focus. For example, an afternoon coffee helps me concentrate and finish important tasks.

× Yes, I often feel tired when when I get home from my work because it is all day I it is long day from work which exhausted me and after I get home I I take bath and dinner it's then it feels.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired when I get home from work because I have been working all day, which exhausts me; after I get home, I take a bath and eat dinner, and then I feel tired.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure issues (ID 26) including repeated words, incorrect word order, missing articles, and tense inconsistency. Correct by removing duplicates, using present perfect progressive idea 'have been working all day' to show continuous action leading up to now, changing 'which exhausted me' to present 'which exhausts me' for habitual situation, adding articles ('a bath'), and separating clauses with appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: break long run-on sentences into shorter clauses and maintain consistent tense for habitual situations.

× I usually feel tired when I came back from work, then it feels me exhausted and sometimes I feel tired when I came back from from vacation.

✓ I usually feel tired when I come back from work; then I feel exhausted. Sometimes I also feel tired when I come back from a vacation.

The student used past tense 'came back' in a general habitual statement, which requires simple present (ID 5). Also 'it feels me exhausted' is incorrect word order and verb usage; use 'I feel exhausted'. Remove duplicate 'from'. Use 'a vacation' for countable noun. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct subject-verb order 'I feel'.

× And because we have to do Rd. plot of travel that's why.

✓ And because we have to do a lot of travel, that's why.

The phrase 'do Rd. plot of travel' is incorrect preposition and word choice (ID 11). Likely intended 'a lot of travel'. Use 'a lot of' as quantifier and 'travel' as noun without extra preposition. Also 'that's why' can conclude the reason. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'a lot of travel' or 'a lot of trips'.

× I usually make cup of coffee whenever I feel tired because it boost my energy and a quick mood swing.

✓ I usually make a cup of coffee whenever I feel tired because it boosts my energy and quickly improves my mood.

Missing definite/indefinite article before 'cup' (ID 22) and subject-verb agreement 'it boost' should be 'it boosts' (ID 27). 'a quick mood swing' is incorrect collocation; use 'quickly improves my mood' or 'gives me a quick mood lift'. Suggestion: include an article for singular countable nouns and ensure verb agrees with subject.

× Uh, in the afternoon a cup of coffee gives me gives me concentrate on work and on life.

✓ In the afternoon, a cup of coffee helps me concentrate on work and on life.

Redundant phrase 'gives me gives me' and incorrect verb construction 'gives me concentrate' (ID 6). Use 'helps me concentrate' or 'allows me to concentrate'. Suggestion: remove repetitions and use correct verb + infinitive structure 'help someone to do something' (or 'help someone do something').