Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct subject-verb agreement, reduce repetition, and fix articles/pronouns (e.g., “a high school student,” “my home”). Aim for 2–3 sentences and include a linking word if adding a reason (e.g., “because” or “so”).

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired after school because I am a high school student with a heavy workload. In addition, my school is far from my home so I have to wake up early and spend a long time commuting, which makes me feel exhausted.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear time or situation and give a specific reason. Avoid fillers like “you know” and vague phrases. Use linking words (e.g., “when,” “because,” “for example”) and correct collocations (e.g., “an overload of work,” “mentally exhausting”). Keep it to 1–2 sentences and be specific about what makes you tired.

Exemplo: I feel tired mainly when I have an overload of schoolwork, especially before exams. For example, juggling many small assignments and a major project in the same week becomes mentally exhausting because I must concentrate for long periods.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence naming your preferred activity, then briefly explain why it helps using specific details and a linking word (e.g., “because,” “so”). Remove hesitations and repetitions, use correct noun forms (e.g., “board games,” “sports”), and choose precise adjectives (“refreshing,” “energizing”). One or two supporting sentences are enough.

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I usually play basketball because it is both physical and social. Playing for thirty minutes refreshes my mind and gives me energy, unlike passive activities such as watching TV.

× Well, as a high school students, there are a lot of a lot of homework and target to do, so I'm usually feel overwhelmed after school because my school's not, it's very far from my homes and I need to wake up early to study a lot.

✓ Well, as a high school student, there is a lot of homework and targets to do, so I usually feel overwhelmed after school because my school is very far from my home and I need to wake up early to study a lot.

Errors: 'students' should be singular to match 'a high school' (singular noun phrase). 'a lot of a lot of homework' is redundant; use 'a lot of homework'. 'homes' should be singular 'home' when referring to the student's residence. Suggestions: Ensure nouns agree in number with determiners and the subject; remove redundant phrases. Also corrected related issues to make sentence grammatical and natural: changed 'there are a lot of homework' to 'there is a lot of homework' because 'homework' is an uncountable noun (fits Singular and plural issue and also Article errors/subject-verb agreement), and 'I'm usually feel' to 'I usually feel' (present tense auxiliary mistake) — see separate entries below.

× Well, as a high school students, there are a lot of a lot of homework and target to do, so I'm usually feel overwhelmed after school because my school's not, it's very far from my homes and I need to wake up early to study a lot.

✓ Well, as a high school student, there is a lot of homework and targets to do, so I usually feel overwhelmed after school because my school is very far from my home and I need to wake up early to study a lot.

Errors: 'there are a lot of homework' is incorrect because 'homework' is uncountable and requires singular verb 'there is'. Also 'I'm usually feel' is ungrammatical; remove 'am' to form 'I usually feel'. Suggestions: Match verb number to the noun (uncountable nouns take singular verbs); avoid extra auxiliary verbs when using 'usually' with simple present.

× When this overload of work and you know, I feel tired and there's a lot of thing to do and I need to expand my brain to do a lot of tiny tasks, a big task and that's few exhausting to me. And yeah.

✓ When I have this overload of work, I feel tired and there are a lot of things to do and I need to use my brain to do many small tasks and big tasks, which is a bit exhausting for me.

Errors: 'a lot of thing' should be 'a lot of things' (plural). 'a lot of tiny tasks, a big task' is awkward; use 'many small tasks and big tasks'. 'that's few exhausting to me' is incorrect; use 'which is a bit exhausting for me'. Suggestions: Use correct quantifiers ('a lot of' + plural countable noun), and choose natural expressions ('a bit exhausting', 'use my brain' rather than 'expand my brain'). Also changed sentence structure for clarity.

× When this overload of work and you know, I feel tired and there's a lot of thing to do and I need to expand my brain to do a lot of tiny tasks, a big task and that's few exhausting to me. And yeah.

✓ When I have an overload of work, I feel tired because there are many things to do and I need to concentrate to complete many small tasks and some big tasks, which is quite exhausting for me.

Errors: Original sentence fragments and connectors ('When this overload of work and you know') create unclear clause structure. 'that's few exhausting to me' is ungrammatical. Suggestions: Start with a clear clause 'When I have an overload of work', use correct connectors ('because'), and ensure the main clause contains a subject and verb. Use appropriate adjectives ('quite exhausting').

× What do you do when you feel tired? Well, there are, there are, there are a lot of thing to do like playing board game or sport, but overall my, uh, the best activities when I feel tired is, is playing basketball because it's very int entertaining and refreshing after.

✓ When I feel tired, there are a lot of things I can do, like playing board games or sports, but overall the best activity for me when I'm tired is playing basketball because it's very entertaining and refreshing afterwards.

Errors: 'a lot of thing' should be 'a lot of things' (plural). 'playing board game or sport' should be 'playing board games or doing sports'. 'my, uh, the best activities ... is' mixes pronouns and number; choose singular 'the best activity ... is'. 'after' used alone is unclear; use 'afterwards'. Suggestions: Use consistent pronouns and number (singular/plural), and select appropriate collocations ('playing board games', 'doing sports', 'the best activity for me'). Also corrected 'int entertaining' to 'entertaining'.