Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid hesitations and unclear words (e.g. “Lilex”, “get the lilacs”, “move”) and check grammar (use present simple: “I often feel tired after work or studying”). Use linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. I usually feel exhausted after a long day of work or studying because I’m on my feet a lot, so I prefer to relax at home with my family or go for a short walk with friends.

Sugestão: Answer directly using a clear time frame, then give a specific reason. Correct basic grammar: use simple past/present forms properly and avoid repetitions. Use linking words like “because” to explain reasons and include one specific detail about your job to make it vivid.

Exemplo: I feel most tired after finishing work, especially because I work at a busy Thai restaurant where I’m on my feet all evening. Because the shifts are long and the restaurant is busy, I often feel drained afterwards.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your usual actions, then give one or two specific activities with linking words (e.g. “for example”, “or”). Fix grammar (use “I like to relax” not “do come to the relax”; use base verbs: “watch movies”, “watch TV”). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

Exemplo: When I feel tired, I like to relax at home. For example, I often watch a movie with friends or spend the evening watching TV with my family, because these activities help me unwind and recover energy.

× I come to the Lilex uh, with my parents and my friend.

✓ I go to Lilex with my parents and my friends.

Plural issue: 'my friend' suggests only one friend while earlier 'my parents and my friend' is awkward; if you mean more than one friend use 'my friends'. Also use 'go to' rather than 'come to' to describe going to a place from home. Suggestion: decide singular or plural and keep it consistent; use 'my friend' only if you mean one person.

× Sometime I can go out with my friend to get the lilacs or I can spend time with my parents like move.

✓ Sometimes I can go out with my friends to get lilacs, or I can spend time with my parents, like moving (or relaxing).

Plural and word choice: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (frequency adverb). If you earlier said 'friends' use plural; 'the lilacs' is usually 'lilacs' when speaking generally. 'like move' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'like moving' or 'like relaxing'. Use gerund after 'like' when describing activities.

× When I would feel tired, uh, in after finish work, because I work really hard, I work to the Thai restaurant, it's busy restaurant and the after work I'm feel tired.

✓ I feel tired after I finish work because I work really hard at a Thai restaurant; it's a busy restaurant, and after work I feel tired.

Present tense and sentence structure: 'When I would feel tired' is incorrect; use simple present 'I feel tired' for habitual actions. 'in after finish work' should be 'after I finish work'. 'I work to the Thai restaurant' should be 'I work at a Thai restaurant'. 'I'm feel tired' should be 'I feel tired'. Also combined clauses with punctuation for clarity.

× For example, I can watching TV together.

✓ For example, we can watch TV together.

Use base verb after modal 'can' (watch) not gerund 'watching'. Also pronoun agreement: 'we' fits 'together'. Suggestion: after modal verbs use base form (can + verb).

× When I feel tired, I would like to do come to the relax on the weekend.

✓ When I feel tired, I like to relax on the weekend.

Incorrect modal and verb use: 'I would like to do come to the relax' is ungrammatical. Use simple present 'I like to relax' for habitual preference. 'Relax' is the verb; 'on the weekend' is correct time phrase. If you want to express intention, 'I would like to relax this weekend' is possible.

× I work to the Thai restaurant, it's busy restaurant and the after work I'm feel tired.

✓ I work at a Thai restaurant; it's a busy restaurant, and after work I feel tired.

Preposition error: use 'work at' to indicate place of employment, not 'work to'. Also 'the after work' is incorrect: use 'after work'. Fix verb 'I'm feel' to 'I feel'.

× Sometime I can go out with my friend to get the lilacs or I can spend time with my parents like move.

✓ Sometimes I can go out with my friends to get lilacs, or I can spend time with my parents, like moving (or relaxing).

Pronoun/number consistency: if you say 'my parents and my friend' earlier, be consistent. Choose 'friend' or 'friends'. Also 'like move' should be 'like moving' (gerund) or 'like to move' if intended differently.

× When I would feel tired, uh, in after finish work, because I work really hard, I work to the Thai restaurant, it's busy restaurant and the after work I'm feel tired.

✓ I feel tired after I finish work because I work really hard at a busy Thai restaurant, so after work I am tired.

Sentence structure: original mixes clauses awkwardly and repeats. Use a clear main clause and subordinate clause: 'I feel tired after I finish work because I work really hard at a busy Thai restaurant.' Combine ideas with conjunctions for clarity.