Tiredness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법과 문장구조를 정확하게 고치고, 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 대답하세요. 예: 주어와 동사의 일치(‘I studying’ → ‘I study’), 전치사와 연결어 사용(‘when I study hard, work late, or wake up early’)을 개선하세요. 또한 불필요한 반복(‘and or’, ‘sleeping late’)을 피하고 한두 문장으로 명확히 표현하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I study hard, work late, or have to wake up early.

Sugestão: 과거·현재 시제 일관성을 유지하고 문장을 더 체계적으로 구성하세요. 예: 주절을 현재형으로 유지(‘I feel tired when I work late’), 시간표현과 결과를 연결할 때 연결어 사용(‘so’, ‘therefore’)을 명확히 하고 형용사 사용법(‘really very tired’ → ‘extremely tired’ 또는 ‘really tired’)을 교정하세요.

Exemplo: I feel tired when I work late. I work as a PCO and my shifts often finish around 11:00 PM, so I usually get home at about 1:00 AM and I feel extremely tired.

Sugestão: 응답을 자연스럽게 연결하고 어순과 관사 사용을 고치세요. 불필요한 접속사('And') 제거, ‘drink a milk’ → ‘drink milk’, 활동의 순서를 명확히 표현하세요. 또한 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하며 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 부드럽게 만드세요.

Exemplo: When I'm really tired, I usually take a bath and tidy my room before going to bed. Right before I sleep, I drink some milk and read a book to relax.

× Yes, I feel tired when I studying hard and or working late or wake up early and sleeping late.

✓ Yes, I feel tired when I study hard, or work late, or wake up early and sleep late.

'studying' and 'sleeping' are incorrect because after 'when' with present simple general situations you should use the base form (study, work, wake, sleep). Use parallel structure for the list and remove the extra 'and' before 'or'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and keep verbs parallel.'

× So when I got home it's about 1:00 AM and that situation really very tired.

✓ So when I get home it's about 1:00 AM and in that situation I am really very tired.

'got' mixes past tense with present habitual context; the rest of the answer uses present simple habit (I work, my job often ends), so use 'get' not 'got'. Also the sentence lacked a proper subject and verb for the final clause: 'that situation really very tired' is ungrammatical. Correct to 'in that situation I am really very tired.' This fixes tense consistency and adds the missing verb 'am'.'

× And I'm really tired. I take a bath or clean my room and go to sleep.

✓ When I'm really tired, I take a bath or clean my room and then go to sleep.

Beginning with 'And' is unnecessary and the sentence lacked clear time linkage. Adding 'When' makes it clear these are typical actions. Also adding 'then' improves the sequence of actions. This corrects structure and cohesion.'

× But right before I go to sleep I drink a milk and read a book.

✓ But right before I go to sleep I drink milk and read a book.

'a milk' is incorrect because 'milk' is an uncountable noun when referring to the substance; do not use the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'a' with 'book' because it is countable. Suggestion: remove 'a' before uncountable nouns like 'milk'.'