Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and does not directly explain how you learned politeness. Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as saying that your parents taught you through reminders and example. Avoid unclear phrases like “whenever I looked up at all I would feel,” and use the past tense consistently because the question asks about childhood. Add one specific example and connect it with linking words such as “for example” or “as a result.”

Exemplo: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you” and reminded me not to interrupt adults. For example, whenever guests visited our home, I was expected to greet them respectfully. As a result, these habits became natural to me.

Sugestão: You answer the question directly and provide relevant reasons and examples. However, there is some repetition of “every day” and “it’s something you need.” Use the article “a” before “skill,” and improve the grammar in phrases such as “in the supermarket” and “when talking to teachers.” Organize the answer more effectively by stating one main reason and then giving two concise examples.

Exemplo: Yes, politeness is extremely important because it affects our everyday interactions. We need it at work, when speaking to teachers, and even when shopping in a supermarket. Being polite shows respect and helps us build positive relationships with other people. It can also prevent unnecessary misunderstandings.

Sugestão: You give a clear opinion and several relevant situations, but the answer could respond more directly by naming specific occasions first. The phrase “politeness is not occasional” sounds unnatural; say “We should be polite on all occasions” instead. Correct “going to supermarket” to “going to the supermarket” and “a genuine and humble person” by adding the missing article. Use parallel structures, such as “when speaking to teachers, at work, and in public places.”

Exemplo: We should be polite on almost all occasions, especially when speaking to teachers, colleagues, or older people. We should also be respectful in public places, such as restaurants and supermarkets. For instance, we should wait patiently in line and speak to staff courteously. These small actions show that we are considerate and mature.

Sugestão: Your answer includes a clear personal attitude and explains that you were careful with your words and actions. However, it ends incomplete after “make adults,” so you need to finish the idea, for example, “make adults feel uncomfortable” or “disappointed.” Also, “always so careful” is slightly awkward; use “very careful.” Add one concrete behavior, such as greeting adults, offering help, or avoiding interruptions, to make the answer more specific.

Exemplo: As a child, I showed politeness by being very careful with my words and actions. I usually greeted adults when I entered a room and said “please” and “thank you” when asking for something. I also avoided interrupting people because I did not want to make them uncomfortable. Since I was quite shy, I generally behaved quietly and respectfully.

× As a child, it is really difficult to control your actions because you are kid and you all the time all you want to do is play and do something that makes people look at you, you want attention.

✓ As a child, it was really difficult to control your actions because you were a kid, and all you wanted to do was play and do things that made people look at you because you wanted attention.

The question asks about your childhood, so the answer should consistently use the past tense. Use was, were, wanted, and made instead of the present-tense forms is, are, want, and makes.

× As a child, it is really difficult to control your actions because you are kid and you all the time all you want to do is play and do something that makes people look at you, you want attention.

✓ As a child, it was really difficult to control your actions because you were a kid, and all you wanted to do was play and do things that made people look at you because you wanted attention.

The singular countable noun kid needs the indefinite article a. We say a kid, not you were kid.

× As a child, it is really difficult to control your actions because you are kid and you all the time all you want to do is play and do something that makes people look at you, you want attention.

✓ As a child, it was really difficult to control your actions because you were a kid, and all you wanted to do was play and do things that made people look at you because you wanted attention.

The original sentence contains awkward word order and joins several complete ideas with commas. Use the natural structure all you wanted to do was play and connect the final idea with because.

× Yes, it is because being polite will be part of your everyday life and it's a significant part because it's not skill you need from time to time.

✓ Yes, it is because being polite is part of your everyday life, and it is significant because it is not a skill you need only from time to time.

The singular countable noun skill needs the indefinite article a. The phrase a skill is required when referring to one skill in general.

× Yes, it is because being polite will be part of your everyday life and it's a significant part because it's not skill you need from time to time.

✓ Yes, it is because being polite is part of your everyday life, and it is significant because it is not a skill you need only from time to time.

The question asks about the general importance of politeness, so the present tense is more appropriate. Use is part rather than will be part for a general fact.

× In your job, talking to teachers, going to supermarket, it's something you need.

✓ At work, when talking to teachers, or when going to the supermarket, it is something you need.

The singular countable noun supermarket needs the definite article the because it refers to the activity of going to a supermarket. The supermarket is the natural expression in this context.

× In your job, talking to teachers, going to supermarket, it's something you need.

✓ At work, when talking to teachers, or when going to the supermarket, it is something you need.

The original sentence lists activities without a clear grammatical structure. Using when before the activities and or between the alternatives makes the sentence clearer and more parallel.

× While talking to teachers, at work, going to supermarket, it will help you be genuine and humble person, which is a significant part of growing up and as an adult you should be able to do that.

✓ Whether you are talking to teachers, working, or going to the supermarket, politeness will help you be a genuine and humble person. This is a significant part of growing up, and as an adult, you should be able to do that.

The singular countable noun person needs the indefinite article a, so use a genuine and humble person. Supermarket also needs an article, so use the supermarket.

× While talking to teachers, at work, going to supermarket, it will help you be genuine and humble person, which is a significant part of growing up and as an adult you should be able to do that.

✓ Whether you are talking to teachers, working, or going to the supermarket, politeness will help you be a genuine and humble person. This is a significant part of growing up, and as an adult, you should be able to do that.

The original sentence has an unclear opening list and combines several ideas in one long sentence. Use a parallel list with whether...or and divide the ideas into two sentences.

× I was always a shy kid and I would never do something that would make adults.

✓ I was always a shy kid, and I would never do something that would upset adults.

The verb make is incomplete because it needs an object or complement explaining what adults would become or feel. The verb upset clearly completes the meaning: you would not do anything that would upset adults.