Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答直接说明了父母的教育方式，也提供了吃饭和犯错时受惩罚的细节，内容基本相关。但时态错误较多：应将“will taught”改为“taught”，“I will have punishment”改为“I would be punished”。此外，“have punishment”不自然，应说“receive punishment”或“be punished”。建议使用过去时，并用“especially”和“as a result”等连接词使表达更连贯；同时避免重复使用“and also”。

Exemplo: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me important rules, especially when I was eating with relatives or friends. For example, I had to wait until everyone was served and speak respectfully. If I behaved badly, I would be punished, so I gradually learned to treat people politely.

Sugestão: 回答观点明确，但第二句存在明显语法和搭配问题。“show what a person you are”应改为“show what kind of person you are”；“on the first impressions on others”表达不自然，应说“create a good first impression”。“it’s about education in your family”意思不够清楚，建议具体说明礼貌体现个人教养，并能帮助建立良好的人际关系。

Exemplo: Yes, I think being polite is extremely important. It shows what kind of person you are and helps you make a good first impression. In addition, polite behavior reflects the way you were brought up and makes other people feel respected.

Sugestão: 回答覆盖了多个场合，但句子结构过长，逻辑不清。“not to mention”使用不当；“lone”应为“alone”；“your behavior mine affects others”应改为“your behavior can affect others”。建议先直接回答“几乎所有场合”，再列举与陌生人交谈、用餐和公共场所等具体例子，并使用“for example”和“because”连接。

Exemplo: We should be polite in almost every situation. For example, we need to use polite language when speaking to strangers, colleagues, or older people, and we should follow good table manners when eating with others. Even when we are alone in public, we should behave respectfully because our actions can still affect the people around us.

Sugestão: 回答结构较清楚，使用了“First of all”和“Then”来组织内容，也提供了问候和遵守餐桌礼仪两个具体例子。不过，“in a loud voice”不一定表示礼貌，更自然的说法是“politely”或“in a respectful voice”；“when we are having meals”应改为过去时“when we had meals”。可以补充一个具体行为，例如等待别人先开始用餐或说“please”和“thank you”。

Exemplo: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting people whenever I met them, usually in a friendly and respectful way. I also used polite words such as “please” and “thank you.” In addition, I followed table manners, such as waiting for everyone to be served before starting a meal.

× My parents will taught me a lot of rules, especially when we were eating with friends or relatives.

✓ My parents taught me a lot of rules, especially when we were eating with friends or relatives.

“Will”后面必须接动词原形，不能接过去式“taught”。此外，问题询问的是童年时期的经历，因此应使用一般过去时“taught”，而不是“will taught”。

× And also if I did something wrong, I will have punishment and that was the thing that made me learn to be polite.

✓ Also, if I did something wrong, my parents punished me, and that was what made me learn to be polite.

这句话描述的是过去的童年经历，所以“will have”不符合时态。应使用过去时，例如“my parents punished me”。“that was what made me...”比“that was the thing that made me...”更自然，但核心修改是过去时。

× It will not only show what a person you are, but also on the first impressions on others and especially it's about education in your family.

✓ It not only shows what kind of person you are, but also makes a good first impression on others, and it especially reflects the education you received in your family.

这里是在表达对礼貌的一般看法，因此应使用一般现在时“shows”和“makes”，而不是将来时“will show”。“impressions”在这里表示一次通常的印象，应使用单数“a good first impression”。原句中“not only...but also...”后的结构不平行，因此改为“shows...makes...”。

× We should be polite almost all the time not to mention talking with people or eating meals with others, but also when you are lone, you should also be polite because your behavior mine affects others.

✓ We should be polite almost all the time—not only when talking with people or eating meals with others, but also when we are alone—because our behavior mainly affects others.

“lone”通常作形容词，表示“孤独的”，这里需要表示“独自地”的“alone”。“not to mention...but also...”不能构成清晰的并列关系，应改为“not only...but also...”。“mine”是名词性物主代词，不能修饰“affects”；这里应使用副词“mainly”，表示“主要地”。同时，调整句子结构可以使并列关系更清楚。

× First of all, when I met someone, I would greet them in a loud voice.

✓ First of all, when I met someone, I would greet them in a loud voice.

这句话的时态和语法没有问题。“met”和“would greet”都可以用于描述过去经常发生的行为，因此不需要修改。

× Then also I would follow the table manners when we are having meals and other rules taught by my parents.

✓ Then, I would follow table manners when we were having meals and other rules taught by my parents.

整段是在描述童年时期的行为，所以“are having”应改为过去进行时“were having”。“when we were having meals”表示“当我们吃饭时”，与过去的背景相匹配。