Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use clearer sentence structure. Start with a topic sentence that answers directly, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., possessive and clause connectors).

Exemplo: I learned to be polite from my aunt Chika. She raised me in Gumby State in northern Nigeria, and she always reminded me to speak respectfully, even when I felt angry or upset. For example, she taught me to say “please” and “thank you” and to wait my turn to speak.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give one clear reason and a concise example. Avoid repetitive phrases and awkward pronouns. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps you build good relationships. For example, polite behaviour at work can make colleagues more willing to help you.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and then one or two specific occasions with linking words. Avoid vague repetition and correct phrasing. Use examples that are grammatically correct and relevant.

Exemplo: We should be polite on all occasions, especially in public and during conversations. For example, be polite when answering questions about events, when meeting new people, or when dealing with customer service.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear statement of actions, then add a specific example. Use correct vocabulary (avoid confusing words like “death” if you mean “that”). Keep sentences short and logical, with linking words such as “so” or “for example.”

Exemplo: As a child, I showed politeness by listening carefully and answering questions respectfully. For example, if someone asked about an event I didn't like, I would still respond calmly and say something like, “I didn't enjoy it much, but I appreciate the effort.”

× I learnt to be polite through my auntie her name is Chika.

✓ I learnt to be polite through my auntie, whose name is Chika.

The original sentence redundantly uses a noun phrase followed by a separate pronoun phrase 'her name is Chika', which is ungrammatical. Use a relative pronoun 'whose' to link the noun 'auntie' with possession. Also add a comma for clarity.

× We stayed back in Gumby State in the northern part of Nigeria where I was taught to be always polite to people whenever I want to speak to them.

✓ We lived in Gumby State in the northern part of Nigeria, where I was taught to always be polite to people whenever I wanted to speak to them.

Use 'lived' rather than 'stayed back' for habitual residence (past tense). Place adverb 'always' before the verb. Maintain past tense consistency with 'wanted' to match 'was taught'. Add a comma before the relative clause for readability.

× And even if I am angry or I am sad about a specific something

✓ Even if I was angry or sad about something.

Complete the sentence and keep past tense consistent with previous statements. Remove redundant 'I am' repetitions and 'specific' which is unnecessary; 'something' suffices. The original is an incomplete clause; correction makes it a full sentence.

× Yes, it's very, very important because if you are polite to people, they wouldn't just see you as being disrespectful, rather they would see you as someone who is very respectful and also has value for him or herself and not just being too rude to people.

✓ Yes, it's very, very important because if you are polite to people, they will not see you as disrespectful; rather, they will see you as someone who is respectful and who values themselves instead of being rude to others.

Use 'will' for general present-future consequences rather than 'would' which is conditional. Simplify redundant phrases: 'as being disrespectful' -> 'as disrespectful'; 'has value for him or herself' -> 'values themselves'. Use parallel structure and clearer pronoun usage.

× Being polite is very important

✓ Being polite is very important.

Add a period to complete the sentence. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct as a simple statement.

× Being polite doesn't really mean you should have a particular time.

✓ Being polite doesn't mean you should reserve it for a particular time.

'Have a particular time' is awkward; 'reserve it for a particular time' clarifies meaning. 'Doesn't really mean' is softened to 'doesn't mean' for clarity.

× You should be polite. You should always be polite to people at all times.

✓ You should always be polite to people at all times.

Combine the two repetitive sentences into one to avoid redundancy. The phrase 'always' and 'at all times' are redundant together; keep both only if for emphasis, otherwise choose one. Here both are retained to preserve emphasis but could be reduced.

× Even when you speak, even when you're being asked about something, you should always come polite.

✓ Even when you speak or when you are asked about something, you should always be polite.

'Come polite' is not idiomatic; use 'be polite'. Simplify 'you're being asked' to 'you are asked' for naturalness. Use parallel structure in the clauses.

× Example, when someone asks you how was these events that happened last night?

✓ For example, when someone asks you, 'How were the events that happened last night?'

The original mixes indirect and direct question forms and has number agreement errors: 'these events' should be 'the events' and 'was' should be 'were' to agree with plural 'events'. Presenting it as a direct quoted question clarifies word order and verb agreement.

× I started by listening and also paying attention to every question that I am being asked, even if I didn't even enjoy whatever that happened that brought that question.

✓ I started by listening and paying attention to every question I was asked, even if I didn't enjoy whatever had happened to cause the question.

Maintain past tense throughout: 'was asked' matches 'started'. Remove redundant 'also' and 'even'. Use past perfect 'had happened' to indicate the earlier event that prompted the question. Simplify wording for clarity.

× I would always be polite and be positive in my response to death.

✓ I would always be polite and respond positively, even to difficult questions.

The phrase 'response to death' is unclear and likely a miswording. Replace with 'respond positively' and 'even to difficult questions' to preserve intended meaning. Use parallel verb forms for readability.