Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer, more natural, and organized. Start with a direct topic sentence describing how you learned politeness, avoid vague or awkward phrasing, correct grammar (e.g., "sticked" → "stuck", "he whipped" → "she would sometimes spank me"), and keep to 2–3 concise sentences. Use linking words to show contrast or reason (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid graphic or culturally sensitive details; say "discipline" or "corrected me" instead.

Exemplo: I learned to be polite mainly from my mother, who corrected my behavior when I was rude. Because she emphasized respect and used firm discipline, her lessons stayed with me, so I try to be polite to others now.

Sugestão: Good direct answer and opinion, but make language more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence ("Yes, I think politeness is very important.") then give one specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words like "because" or "therefore" and avoid redundant phrases like "I do believe" and "It's the rule itself."

Exemplo: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it shapes how others perceive you. For example, people are more willing to help someone who speaks respectfully, so politeness helps build good relationships.

Sugestão: Be specific and avoid unclear phrases. Start with a clear answer ("We should be polite in most situations, especially...") then list two typical occasions with brief reasons, using linking words like "especially" and "for example." Correct awkward expressions such as "on the right, tracked" and tighten the sentence count to 2–3.

Exemplo: We should be polite in most situations, especially in public and at work. For example, showing courtesy on public transport makes things smoother, and politeness at work helps maintain professional relationships.

Sugestão: Clarify cultural terms and give a concise explanation. Start with a topic sentence explaining the practice (e.g., using specific polite words), briefly define the term, and give one example of when you used it. Remove hesitations like "uh" and correct wording ("respective" → "respectful").

Exemplo: As a child in the Philippines, I often used the word "po," a formal particle to show respect. For example, I would say "po" when answering my parents or elders to show that I respected their authority.

× When I was young and if I did something wrong, my mom would tell me or correct me in a way that it was sticked on my mind.

✓ When I was young, if I did something wrong, my mom would tell me or correct me in a way that it stuck in my mind.

The original uses 'was sticked' which mixes past tense with incorrect past participle form. 'Stick' is irregular; the past tense and past participle is 'stuck'. Also remove unnecessary 'and' after the time clause for clarity. Suggestion: use 'stuck' for past tense and simplify the clause structure.

× It's either he whipped me on the butt and tell me that that's incorrect, you have to be like this, or that you have to respect other people's choices and.

✓ Either he whipped me on the butt and told me that was incorrect and that I had to behave that way, or he told me to respect other people's choices.

Multiple errors: mixed tenses and informal structure. 'Tell' should be past 'told' to match 'whipped'. The fragment ending with 'and.' is incomplete. Rephrase to complete the thought and keep past tense consistent ('whipped' and 'told'). Also replace awkward 'be like this' with 'behave that way'.

× It is also the way how you reflect to other people.

✓ It is also the way you present yourself to other people.

'Reflect to' is incorrect collocation; we usually say 'reflect on' or 'reflect who you are' but better is 'present yourself'. 'How' is unnecessary with 'the way' here. Suggestion: use correct verb and remove extra 'how'.

× If you want to be someone to be respected, you have to be polite to them too.

✓ If you want to be someone who is respected, you have to be polite to others too.

Awkward relative clause 'someone to be respected' should be 'someone who is respected.' Also 'them' is vague; 'others' is clearer. Modal 'have to' is acceptable and kept.

× I think all the time and if you are on the right, tracked or on the right side of the story, because there's nothing wrong to be polite and there's nothing wrong doing things like this.

✓ I think we should be polite all the time, even if you are on the right side of the story, because there is nothing wrong with being polite and doing things like that.

This sentence has structural problems: misplaced 'and', incorrect collocations 'wrong to be polite' should be 'wrong with being polite', and 'wrong doing' missing preposition 'with' and gerund form 'being'. 'Tracked' is incorrect here and removed. Reorder for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× we used this pop and all pop, which means, uh, yes, but in a very formal way and respective way.

✓ We used this 'po' and 'opo', which mean 'yes' but in a very formal and respectful way.

The student likely referred to Filipino respectful particles 'po' and 'opo'. 'Pop' is misspelled; use 'po' and 'opo'. 'Respective' is incorrect; 'respectful' is the intended adjective. Verb agreement changed to 'mean' to match plural subject.

× And I always answer my parents with those words so that I can show them that I follow them without being rude to them.

✓ I always answered my parents with those words to show them that I respected them without being rude.

Context discusses childhood (past). Maintain past tense: 'answered' and 'respected'. Also simplify 'so that I can show them that I follow them' to 'to show them that I respected them' for clarity and correct tense/mood.