Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct mistakes (e.g. 'while hosting guests', 'they used words like "please" and "thank you"'). Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: I learned to be polite mainly by watching my parents. For example, when they hosted guests they always said "please" and "thank you," and they taught me to greet elders respectfully. Because I copied their behavior at home, I naturally became polite in public and with relatives.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, then support with one clear reason and an example. Fix word choice and grammar (e.g. 'representative of your family'). Avoid repeating the same point twice.

Exemplo: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it reflects a person’s upbringing and respect for others. For instance, polite behavior at work or social events creates a positive impression and helps build good relationships.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer and avoid long confusing clauses. Use one or two specific exceptions and linking words like 'however' or 'unless'. Correct phrasing: 'we should be polite on most occasions, unless someone is deliberately rude.'

Exemplo: We should be polite on most occasions, such as at work, school, and family gatherings. However, if someone is deliberately abusive, it is acceptable to set boundaries rather than respond politely all the time.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two specific examples with correct grammar and concise phrasing. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to connect ideas and keep it within five sentences.

Exemplo: As a child I showed politeness by helping my relatives and using respectful language. For example, I often served tea and called older family members 'aunt' or 'uncle,' and I always said 'please' and 'thank you' when asking for things.

× As a child I used to observe my parents and my close relatives and most of the time they were being polite and while dogging to guests they used to word they use words like please thank you while addressing them and by observing all this I have learned to be polite.

✓ As a child I used to observe my parents and close relatives; most of the time they were polite, and when talking to guests they used words like please and thank you. By observing all this, I learned to be polite.

Errors include awkward progressive form 'were being polite' (simple past 'were polite' is more natural for habitual past), incorrect phrase 'while dogging to guests' (wrong word and structure) and repeated/confused verbs 'they used to word they use words'. Use simple past or habitual 'used to' for repeated past actions. Replace incorrect vocabulary with 'talking to guests' and keep verbs consistent: 'used words'. Use punctuation to separate ideas and make sentence clearer.

× Yes, in my opinion, being polite is more important than any other behavior as it gives a lot more information about your growth and your upbringing. So being polite is very important as you are a representator of your family.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, being polite is more important than other behaviors because it gives a lot of information about your growth and upbringing. So being polite is very important because you are a representative of your family.

Problems: 'any other behavior' sounds awkward; use plural 'other behaviors'. 'Gives a lot more information' is comparative without clear reference; 'gives a lot of information' is clearer. 'Your upbringing' already includes 'your', so keep concise. 'Representator' is incorrect — correct noun is 'representative'. Replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer causal connection.

× I, in my opinion, we should be polite in all the occasions unless and until someone is really messing you up and indulging you to have to come down to their level until then you have to follow straight

✓ In my opinion, we should be polite on all occasions unless someone is deliberately provoking you and forcing you to lower yourself; until then, you should remain polite.

Errors: redundant phrases 'unless and until' and ungrammatical insertion 'I, in my opinion, we'. Use single subject 'In my opinion, we should...' or 'I think we should...'. Preposition 'in all the occasions' should be 'on all occasions'. 'Messing you up and indulging you to have to come down to their level' is ungrammatical; replace with 'deliberately provoking you and forcing you to lower yourself'. 'Follow straight' is unclear — use 'remain polite'.

× As a child I used to serve tea coffee to my relatives and I used to address them with by calling aunt and uncle and as well as I used to use words like please and thank you all this shows I am being polite

✓ As a child I used to serve tea and coffee to my relatives. I addressed them by calling them aunt and uncle, and I used words like please and thank you. All this shows I was polite.

Issues: missing conjunction 'and' between 'tea coffee' should be 'tea and coffee'. Unnecessary 'used to' repetition can be simplified; use 'I addressed them' for past habit. 'Address them with by calling' is ungrammatical; use 'by calling them'. Final clause 'all this shows I am being polite' mixes present with past context; use past 'I was polite' or 'it showed I was polite' to match tense.