Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Content is unclear and grammar is incorrect. Give a direct topic sentence describing how parents taught you (e.g., through instructions and modelling), then one or two supporting details with clear linking words. Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., 'told me', 'speak quietly', 'behave politely'). Keep to under five sentences.

Exemplo: My parents taught me to be polite mainly by example and instruction. For instance, they often told me to speak quietly and say 'please' and 'thank you' when we were outside, and they corrected me gently if I was rude. As a result, I learned to be considerate of other people in public.

Sugestão: Answer is short and contains unclear vocabulary ('Good Mana'). Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'therefore'). Use relevant vocabulary like 'respect', 'comfort', 'social harmony'. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and makes social interactions more pleasant. For example, polite behaviour helps strangers feel comfortable on public transport and can reduce conflicts, so people cooperate more easily.

Sugestão: The answer addresses an occasion but is wordy and grammatically weak. Start with a topic sentence listing occasions (e.g., public transport, workplaces, family gatherings), then give a specific reason for one occasion with a linking word. Use concise phrasing and correct grammar.

Exemplo: We should be polite in many situations, such as on public transport, at work, and during family gatherings. For instance, on buses and trains it is important to stay calm and speak quietly because many people are sharing a small space and want to feel comfortable.

Sugestão: The answer is understandable but has tense and phrasing errors. Use past tense consistently and give a clear topic sentence about actions you took, followed by a supporting detail or brief example with a linking word. Replace vague phrases like 'talk about something' with specific behaviours (e.g., 'interrupt', 'speak loudly').

Exemplo: When I was a child, I usually stayed quiet in public places because my parents taught me not to speak loudly or interrupt others. For example, I would wait my turn to speak and always say 'excuse me' when I needed attention.

× I was told we're not by my parents.

✓ I was told not to be rude by my parents.

The original sentence uses the contraction 'we're not' which is unclear and grammatically incorrect in this context. The speaker meant to report advice from parents about behavior, so an infinitive clause 'not to be rude' is appropriate after 'told'. Use of 'rude' clarifies the intended meaning and corrects pronoun misuse.

× When I went outside, my parents said you should quite

✓ When I went outside, my parents said I should be quiet.

The sentence lacks a correct form after 'said' and uses 'quite' (an adverb) instead of 'quiet' (an adjective). Also 'you' is inconsistent with the reported speech about the student. Use 'I should be quiet' to match the speaker and correct word form.

× This is because Good Mana help us to keep comfortable.

✓ This is because good manners help us to feel comfortable.

'Good Mana' appears to be a misspelling; the correct phrase is 'good manners' (plural noun). 'Help' requires a plural subject 'good manners', and 'to keep comfortable' is awkward; 'feel comfortable' is a natural collocation. Also capitalization corrected to lowercase 'good'.

× One of the examples is using transportation systems because a lot of people use transportation system to stay calm and quiet is important.

✓ One example is using public transportation, because many people use transportation systems, so staying calm and quiet is important.

The original mixes singular and plural ('transportation system' vs 'transportation systems') and has a run-on structure. Rephrase to 'One example is using public transportation' and use 'many people' (quantifier) with 'transportation systems' (plural). Separate the reason with 'so' to make the sentence grammatical and clear.

× When I was a child, I tend to be quiet when I go to other places because my parents told me you shouldn't talk about something.

✓ When I was a child, I tended to be quiet when I went to other places because my parents told me I shouldn't talk about certain things.

Tense inconsistency: describing past habits requires past tense 'tended' and 'went'. The quoted advice should match person 'I shouldn't' rather than 'you'. 'Something' is vague; 'certain things' is more natural. These changes correct tense and pronoun usage.