Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, trật tự từ và từ vựng chính xác; phát triển câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể, súc tích. Cần dùng thì và đại từ đúng (ví dụ: 'my parents taught me'), thay 'touch' bằng 'taught' và sửa các cụm như 'say things when someone get me candies' thành 'say thank you when someone gives me a candy'. Giữ câu không quá dài (tối đa 3–4 câu) và dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc.

Exemplo: When I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite. For example, they showed me how to say hello to others and how to say "thank you" when someone gave me a candy. I still follow those manners today.

Sugestão: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp ý rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích lý do ngắn gọn với ví dụ. Chú ý thì và cấu trúc (ví dụ: 'I have pursued' hoặc 'I have always valued'). Tránh mệnh đề rườm rà; dùng tính từ đúng ('shows your character' và 'shows you are well educated').

Exemplo: Yes, I believe politeness is very important. I have always valued good manners because they reflect your character and show that you are well educated. For example, polite behaviour helps you make a good impression at work or school.

Sugestão: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn về nhiều tình huống, không chỉ một ví dụ; cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng (ví dụ: 'occasions that commemorate soldiers who sacrificed for the country', 'we pay our respects'). Hoàn thiện câu và tránh thiếu động từ hoặc danh từ (ví dụ 'tribute to the elderly' cần rõ ràng).

Exemplo: We should be polite on many occasions, such as during national memorial days that commemorate soldiers who sacrificed for the country. In Vietnam, for example, we pay our respects on Memorial Day by observing silence and laying flowers to honour the deceased.

Sugestão: Sửa thì và động từ (ví dụ: 'I said' not 'I say'), hoàn chỉnh các mệnh đề và dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn: câu chủ đề + hai chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh thiếu phần kết (ví dụ 'I will' bỏ trống). Dùng ví dụ cụ thể về cách chào hỏi người lớn và nói 'please'/'thank you'.

Exemplo: When I was a little girl, I always said hello to everyone I met, but I greeted older people more respectfully. For example, I would use polite phrases and I always said "please" when asking and "thank you" when someone helped me.

× MMM when I was a child my parent touch me.

✓ MMM when I was a child my parents taught me.

Incorrect pronoun/plural and verb form: 'parent' should be plural 'parents' because reference implies both or more; 'touch me' is wrong verb choice and tense—use 'taught me' to express learning in the past. Use past tense 'taught' to match 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: use 'my parents taught me' for clear past action by caregivers.

× I want to be polite.

✓ I wanted to be polite.

Tense issue: the context is childhood (past), so present 'want' is inconsistent. Change to past tense 'wanted'. Suggestion: match tense to time reference (use past for childhood).

× For example they touch me how to say hello to the others and say things when someone get me candies.

✓ For example they taught me how to say hello to others and what to say when someone gives me candy.

Multiple errors: pronoun/plural 'they' ok but verb form 'touch' incorrect—should be 'taught'. 'the others' is unnatural here; use 'others'. 'when someone get me candies' has subject-verb agreement and word choice issues: 'get' should be 'gives' and 'candies' usually 'candy' as uncountable in this context. Suggestion: use 'taught me how to say hello to others and what to say when someone gives me candy.'

× I've followed that things to now.

✓ I have followed those things until now.

Determiner and word choice errors: 'that things' should be 'those things' (plural demonstrative). 'to now' is unnatural; use 'until now'. Suggestion: use 'I have followed those things until now.'

× Of course, being polite is one of the most important things that I pursue in my life until now when I was a girl

✓ Of course, being polite has been one of the most important things I have pursued in my life since I was a girl.

Tense inconsistency and preposition use: 'is' and 'until now when I was a girl' mix present and past incorrectly. Use present perfect 'has been' and 'have pursued' with 'since I was a girl' to indicate continuation from past to present. Suggestion: use present perfect to show an action or value continuing from childhood to present.

× It is not only show your characteristic but also show how you are well educated.

✓ It not only shows your character but also shows how well educated you are.

Verb form and word choice: 'show' needs third person singular 'shows' to agree with 'It'. 'characteristic' is wrong noun here; use 'character' or 'personality'. Word order in 'how you are well educated' is incorrect; correct is 'how well educated you are.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun choice.

× I think that on occasions that memorized the soldiers that sacrificed for the countries for example, in Vietnam, we have Home King Commemoration Day that where we pay our respect and tribute to the older

✓ I think on occasions that commemorate soldiers who sacrificed for the country. For example, in Vietnam we have the Hung Kings' Commemoration Day where we pay our respects and tribute to the elders.

Multiple preposition and relative clause errors: 'memorized' misuse—should be 'commemorate'. 'that sacrificed for the countries' should be 'who sacrificed for the country'. 'Home King Commemoration Day' incorrect name and article use—correct to 'the Hung Kings' Commemoration Day'. 'pay our respect' should be plural 'pay our respects'. 'the older' should be 'the elders'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for ceremonies (commemorate), relative pronoun 'who' for people, and proper nouns/articles.

× When I was just a little girl, I say hello to everyone that I saw but in different ways for example when I say hello to older I will or when I want them to do something for me, I will say please and thank you if they done it.

✓ When I was just a little girl, I said hello to everyone I saw but in different ways. For example, when I said hello to elders I would... or when I wanted them to do something for me, I would say please and thank you if they did it.

Tense inconsistency: mixing present 'say' with past context 'When I was...'. Change to past 'said'. Modal usage: 'will' in past narrative should be 'would'. 'older' should be 'elders' or 'older people'. 'if they done it' incorrect past participle—should be 'if they did it'. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout childhood descriptions, use 'would' for habitual past actions, and correct past forms.