Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구성과 어휘 선택에서 많은 오류가 있습니다. 우선 질문에 직접적으로 답하는 주제문을 명확히 제시하세요(예: I learned to be polite from my parents/teachers). 이후 관련 세부사항을 2–3개로 한정하여 논리적으로 연결하세요. 문법(과거형, 관사, 전치사), 단어 철자와 적절한 어휘(polite, learn, visit, nature, raccoon 등)를 교정하고, 연결어(for example, because, when)로 문장을 매끄럽게 이어보세요. 예를 들어 장소와 경험을 말할 때는 ‘went to Nemo Mountain’ 대신 ‘visited Nemo Mountain in Canada’처럼 정확한 표현을 쓰고, ‘we do not saw the environment’는 ‘we did not see such natural environments in South Korea’로 고치세요.

Exemplo: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents when I was a child. For example, my parents taught me to use polite words and to show respect to elders when we visited places. When I was about ten, I visited Nemo Mountain in Canada with my friends and I saw many flowers, trees and even raccoons, which made me more aware of being careful and respectful to nature. Because of these experiences, I try to behave politely in public and treat the environment with care.

Sugestão: 의미 전달이 불분명하고 어휘 선택이 잘못되었습니다(‘politic’ 대신 ‘polite’ 사용). 질문에 직접 답하는 주제문을 명확히 한 뒤, 이유를 2개 정도 제시하고 각 이유를 간단한 예로 뒷받침하세요. 연결어(because, for example, so)를 사용해 논리적으로 연결하고, 불필요한 반복을 피하세요. 또한 문법(주어-동사 일치, 명사 복수형 등)과 어휘(relationship, friend, polite behaviour)를 수정하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people build and maintain good relationships. For example, using polite language and showing consideration can make strangers more willing to help you. Also, politeness reduces conflicts, so people can cooperate more easily in daily life.

× When I was young I went to Canada at Nemo Mountain.

✓ When I was young, I went to Canada to visit Nemo Mountain.

The original sentence uses a slightly incorrect preposition 'at' for purpose/location; also clarity improves by adding 'to visit'. Use of past simple 'went' is correct for a past event but the preposition needed correction. Suggestion: use 'to' when indicating purpose or 'at' only for being located at a place (e.g., 'I was at Nemo Mountain').

× I learned about a pollit as a child and I listed the mountain with my friends.

✓ I learned about politeness as a child and I climbed the mountain with my friends.

The word 'pollit' is a misspelling and wrong form; the noun should be 'politeness'. 'Listed the mountain' is incorrect verb choice; the intended meaning is likely 'climbed the mountain'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and appropriate verbs that match the action.

× I saw all the flowers and trees and lacoon.

✓ I saw all the flowers, trees, and raccoons.

The sentence lists items but contains a misspelling 'lacoon' instead of 'raccoon' and lacks proper commas for clarity. Suggestion: spell animal names correctly and separate list items with commas.

× In South Korea we do not saw the environment.

✓ In South Korea we did not see the environment.

The sentence mixes present auxiliary 'do' with past verb 'saw', which is incorrect. For past negative, use 'did not' + base verb 'see'. Suggestion: use 'did not see' for negation in the past tense.

× I think being politic is very important because the politic can make a lot of things I believe for example the thing means that two polyps can make a friends relationship.

✓ I think being polite is very important because politeness can achieve many things. For example, it helps two people become friends.

Several issues: 'politic' is an adjective meaning relating to politics; the correct adjective for manners is 'polite' and the noun is 'politeness'. 'The politic can make a lot of things' is ungrammatical and unclear; use 'politeness can achieve many things'. 'Polyps' is incorrect word for people; use 'people'. 'Make a friends relationship' is ungrammatical; use 'become friends' or 'form a friendship'. Suggestion: choose correct lexical items (polite/politeness, people) and natural collocations (become friends, form a friendship).

× It is very important.

✓ It is very important.

This sentence is grammatically correct but repetitive given the prior statement. Suggestion: keep or combine with previous sentence to avoid repetition, e.g., 'Overall, I believe politeness is very important.'