Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and incomplete sentences. Use past tense consistently and correct small grammar errors (e.g., I learned, teachers taught me).

Exemplo: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my parents modelled respectful behaviour at home and corrected me when I used rude language, and my primary school teachers taught us manners through role‑playing activities, which helped me practise polite responses.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then provide specific reasons or examples linked with connectors (because, so, for example). Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., everyone needs to behave politely in society). Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it helps people communicate smoothly and build trust. For example, polite behaviour at school or work can prevent conflicts and make cooperation easier.

× I hold the view that I learn to be polite from my parents and my teachers.

✓ I believe that I learned to be polite from my parents and my teachers.

The student uses present simple 'learn' with 'hold the view' to describe past learning in childhood. This is a tense mismatch; 'learned' (past simple) is appropriate because the action happened in the past. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when talking about completed actions in childhood (e.g., 'I learned').

× First. Parents play a key role in my childhood and they teach me how to be a polite person, how to be umm, to grow up and the teachers.

✓ First, parents played a key role in my childhood and they taught me how to be a polite person and how to grow up; my teachers helped too.

The original has sentence fragments, inconsistent tense and unclear coordination. 'First.' is a fragment; 'play' and 'teach' should be past tense to match 'in my childhood.' 'How to be umm, to grow up and the teachers' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: combine ideas into one clear sentence, use past tense for childhood events, and place 'teachers' as an additional subject ('my teachers helped too').

× Of course, yes, everyone needs to replied in the social, uh, in the society.

✓ Of course, yes, everyone needs to behave politely in society.

The phrase 'needs to replied' is ungrammatical: modal-like structure 'needs to' should be followed by the base verb 'reply' or a more appropriate verb; however 'reply' is not the intended meaning. Also 'in the social, in the society' is awkward; use 'in society'. Suggestion: use 'needs to' + base verb and choose the correct verb for intended meaning (e.g., 'behave politely').

× And I think be in courtesy is crucial for, for uh, young people, for even for young people.

✓ And I think being courteous is crucial for young people.

'Be in courtesy' is incorrect phraseology; the adjective form 'courteous' or gerund 'being courteous' is correct. The repetition 'for, for uh, ... for even for young people' is redundant. Suggestion: use 'being courteous' or 'courteous behavior' and avoid repetition; keep the sentence concise.