Politeness— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct some grammar errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Remove redundancy and fix verb forms (e.g., “not being alone” → “not be alone”).

Exemplo: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. For example, when I was young I often spoke bluntly to classmates and, as a result, they stopped inviting me to play. Because of that experience, I made a conscious effort to watch my words and be more considerate so I wouldn't lose friends.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and formality, correct vocabulary and grammar, and organize ideas with linking words. Use formal contractions (avoid "wanna"), correct phrases ("interested in you" unclear), and give one clear reason with an example. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I think politeness is essential today. For instance, during a job interview, being courteous and respectful shows employers that you can work well with colleagues, which increases your chances of being hired.

× I was rude to my friends and then they left me.

✓ I was rude to my friends, and then they left me.

The sentence needed a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. This is a punctuation/structure issue closely related to past-tense clauses; add the comma to improve clarity and proper sentence structure. Suggestion: Place a comma before 'and' when connecting two independent clauses.

× So that's how I learned that it is important to actually keep paying attention to what you say to different people and try not to hurt them in order to not being alone.

✓ So that's how I learned that it is important to actually keep paying attention to what you say to different people and try not to hurt them so as not to be alone.

The phrase 'in order to not being alone' incorrectly uses the -ing form after 'to' and an unnatural word order. After 'in order to' or 'so as to' we use the base form of the verb ('be'), not the -ing form. Also 'so as not to be alone' is a more natural and grammatical phrasing. Suggestion: Use the base verb after 'to' or rephrase to 'so as not to' + base verb.

× I think it is essential nowadays.

✓ I think it is essential nowadays.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× If you wanna get a well paid job for instance, you need to be really kind and into you during the your job interview, so.

✓ If you want to get a well-paid job, for instance, you need to be really polite and confident during your job interview.

'wanna' is informal slang; use 'want to' in formal speech. 'Well paid' should be hyphenated as 'well-paid' when used as an adjective before a noun. 'Kind and into you' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'polite and confident'. Also 'the your' is incorrect—use 'your'. Remove the trailing filler 'so.' Suggestion: Use standard forms ('want to'), hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns, and choose clear adjectives ('polite', 'confident').

× Their employer won't feel you would look at you as a threat for their community of their work, for instance.

✓ An employer would not see you as a threat to their workplace community, for instance.

The original sentence has multiple problems: incorrect subject referencing ('Their employer' is confusing following 'you') and wrong verb phrases ('won't feel you would look at you'). Also 'threat for their community of their work' is awkward; use 'threat to their workplace community'. This correction simplifies the subject to 'An employer' and fixes verb choice and preposition use ('see as a threat to'). Suggestion: Ensure clear subject reference, use 'see someone as a threat' and 'threat to' + noun, and avoid redundant possessives.